Chandni

Hey I am sure you can do way better than this, it's not unique in any kind of way so not unique I don't think it should be called poetry, ...

Hi Shafter, I love the whole scene and imaginery been created here, I like your rhyming structure, but the rhyming itself is pretty average, your usage of words is too ...

Well first of all I like the title, but was kind of dissapointed when it turned out that it turns out to be a little less about coffee as I ...

Well your last two line's were the best I guess :) Other than that, your rhyming scene is average en the rythem is a bit off as well. Oh yeah ...

I guess everything was cleared above, welcome to YWS :) And please work on your spelling :wink: like capitalizing "I" Thanks :)

The days have now shortened when just a week ago we felt yellow jackets menace the thin skin at our wrists. Tight decscription I really like, but you might have ...

Well Well hmmmm had to read it twice :) But I figured I got it quite a bit, I like it the rythem not everywhere is as nice as it ...

Erhmm well I'd say Harry Potter, LOTR story is very very dull to read very descripted and such, if the film is already so descpripted you wouldnt expect anyyy less ...

Perfectly rewritten well use of the critiques ;) Touching topic, as if it were my own brother Nice Job ;)

Awesome poem really :) one thing In three hundred years When trivial seem these fears Of global warming, And a church reforming . Here do you mean a specific church ...

Cute Cute subject :) I've lost a pet recently as well and I can totally relate which is a great thing to start off with. As said before, the flow ...

I'm liking this Tassen :) Neat Work, Wonderfull Decriptions, very touching ;)

I step outside Into the still bright twilight The air with a bit of chill, beginning to descend And starting to turn crisp. I breathe deeply, and look to the ...

Wow, I really liked this :) Just one quick note : Breathing to the rythym Of the crashing waves and silence But for the water's whispers. Then your voice, low ...

I like your beginning :) and as said above, I agree. also in the end your stanza's get fuller.... which makes it look a bit odd overall ----- ------ ------- ...