Chandni

Really Nice.. I liked it alot The '' Heroin.'' part just adds this special thing to it Verrry nice And without her I'm stuck here, In reality with all its ...

Hey nice work first I like the short poemzies in the story but i'll have too agree with blackgroundbob. The story well... I never read the fiction section i'm not ...

its nice but it would flow more nicely if you would put in in stanza's the rythem and how you want to do that is up to you tough. if ...

Yeah i'll go with what ''Once upon a dream" said and I think it doesn't quite belong in Lyric Poetry but better in Narrative Poetry but then ofcourse that's just ...

Pretty cool :wink: I like the story and how it rhymes when you tell it Not much of a comment this is as I need to advance in my comment ...

Very nice !! :D just a few things tough I'm the whose heart feels all the tension, Im the one whose heart feels all the thension I'm the guy who ...

its okay... one thing try to use a word only one time I wish that we weren't through But then again you never knew How much I really felt for ...

Mooi Mooi... :wink: I like your way in words !! So bitter is the end So bitter it tastes like sugar I like this line :) Soo bitter it tastes ...