Celdover

Hello hello! I don't normally find fics in my fandoms on here. Let's get started, shall we? The first thing I notice about this piece is the extreme amount of ...

Hello there! Before I get started I just want to clarify that I have not read chapter one. Nonetheless, I hope I will be able to provide some insight that ...

Hello there! I noticed that this got lost all the way at the bottom of the Green Room, so I'm here to help out. Before I get started, however, I'd ...

*emerges from the dark depths known as "Lurking"* Where do I begin? Let's start with the pretentiousness. I cannot count how many stories I've seen with a beginning similar to ...

Hello there. I am honestly more confused by this than anything else. I have definitely read far worse works on this site when it comes to mechanics and form, but ...

Hello there. I am Celdover, long time gamer and researcher on this exact subject, and I am here to give you a proper review. First things first, I commend you ...

Hello there. I am Celdover, and I shall be your reviewer this fine eve. I haven't reviewed in a while now, so do bear with me. First, let's start off ...

Hello there! I'm Dover, and I shall be your reviewer today. I have quite a bit to say here, so if you want the short (and more merciful) version scroll ...

This is very much a nitpick but I can't let it go by unnoticed. The screams of the wounded and dying rent the air like glass breaking. I do not ...

Hello there! Well, it certainly looks like Ita did a thorough job of telling you where this piece falls flat, and I really can't top his review. But what I ...

Hello there! I see you have a prologue. A cute little prologue, indeed! But you can make it better. Let's start with your narrator. Based on what the characters have ...

Hello there. This certainly seems like an emotional piece here! I can see you like to use lots of metaphors and symbolism, and that can be a great thing. Now ...

Hi there! First off I'd like to say that I like the idea behind your piece. I think it's an excellent opportunity to show character development, though there are a ...

Hello there. This piece has gone too long without a second opinion. Allow me to remedy that. I agree with Yoda down there. This piece has potential, but there are ...

All right, I have absolutely no idea what you were going for when you wrote this. It's listed under the short stories humor category, and I can indeed tell that ...