CardDragon

gental men is spelled wrong... it is supposed to be gentle men

I shall comment tomorrow cause I am sleepy.

I have decided to post a extended and corrected version of the song.

This a good story but it could go into detail. The story would be better if the lines weren't all spaced out.

This is a good story, but the fact it is not your story just throws people off from reading it. A better place for this would be in your blog. ...

The person who is leaping across roofs is laughing because leaping far distances and onto buildings is death defying. He is laughing to keep himself from stopping and freaking out.

V.2 Beautiful boy, you've always held my heart Even from the start That version 2.

This poem is short ans simple, but you get it. This person has been beat up or some UN-honorable crime happened to her and she wonders if she is the ...

On the contrary to wickedwonder, this story did not have too much description. Sorry to say, it was just too boring. You could have made it more clearer, but keep ...

I like this poem because it compares a star to a human. It didn't seem to rhyme if it was supposed to. Well that's all this dragon can say,bye.

ELLO! I had a problem understanding this poem. Basically it is about a person telling about a secret feeling. Though I am not sure that is what it means.

so they are actually food? A strange and hungry- tickling story.

Do not change it with foreshadowing, the story took me by storm. It is my favorite story!

Thanks everyone for there comments. It keeps me going. This is much better than approval from family. ;)

My advice exactly is to write out a plan in which you want this story to go.. Other than that it seems nice, but as you know some dreams are ...