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Okay! Hey there Jay. Mwhahaha, we are indeed treated to Sarah/Cole dialogue. Excellent. Unfortunately, it was rather disappointing! Like, nothing original. Sarah's kind and concerned, Cole is brusque

Hey there Jay! A belated review of your second chapter. Overall, this was good. Your dream sequence was good, and you included your character's emotions afterwards, something that I haven't ...

Alright, hey there, sis! As promised, my review. Not that there is actually much for me to review here, per say. These are interesting excerpts, well-written overall. They certainly make ...

Hey there, Chuck and Ly! This is the first prose I’ve read from either of you. Sadly, I wasn’t impressed. This might have potential to be something decent, but is ...

Hey there dizzy! Welcome to YWS! I hope you’ll have a great time here. Now, to the piece proper. This was labeled under ‘short story > horror’. Usually, horror is ...

Hi there musicgirl! This should be under Fantasy, Fanfiction. Because this is clearly a Persy Jackson fanfiction. Seriously. Twelfth birthday, Cap Zeus, a centaur teacher named Chiron. Really? Really?

Oh woe. I dash to your second chapter, eager to see if you've now introduced cunning and satirical elements of humor, but alas all is naught! This proceeds exactly as ...

Hellooo meth! Before I comment on the chapter, I feel the need to point out the numerous times when you don't space words or start a new line when it ...

Hey there, austinpotnyok! This was written well enough, there weren't any major grammatical mistakes, only very picky nit-picks. The suspenseful end is okay, though the chapter is a bit short. ...

Hey MythWriter99! Oh yay, another zombie apocalypse. This is a very risky and tricky genre to write properly. It's been done over and over again so many times, parodied and ...

Hey there, sis! Again, this is painstakingly brief. Now brief chapters are a thing, yes, but I like mine slightly longer. Especially in a more serious fantasy, which this seems ...

Hey sis! Time to stalk review all your works. After reading this, I wondered if this was one of your earlier works. The grammar here could certainly be improved on. ...

Hi again, Animal. This chapter has far, far too much dialogue. It's basically dialogue, with no action and no description. You don't describe the various ambassadors other than the names, ...

Hey there Animal, Ita here to review. This chapter, like the novel, could be interesting. However let me be frank, it's very very implausible. I may have mentioned in the ...

Hi there again. AHA. I knew it. The character is the house. I'm such a genius, ahaha. This actually explains why the description is lacking. The house doesn't describe itself, ...