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Hard/facade rhymes for me! I think that might be a UK/US accent difference :) Also xD I mostly had to comment because that's a most excellent first association for the ...

Hey Ignorance, sorry to just leap in with corrections, but this is one that bugs me a lot - while "realized" is correct in the USA, "realised" is the correct ...

Oh man. This is amazing. I'm getting ideas. I can see it as part of something longer, and I want to read that something! xD

Just a note about the spelling - 'realise' is the British English spelling, and 'realize' is the American English. For future reference, both are correct!

You're welcome! Happy to help!

I'm glad to hear you're getting back into it - my writing has also suffered from things like uni, and starting to write stuff again is seeming quite tough >< ...

I know, it's a massive pain, right? xD Whenever I try writing something in present, I'm back to past by paragraph three :P

Thank you very much for the review - I'm so glad you enjoyed the story!

Woo, 50th beckew review! I was worried about the child's dialogue. There are a couple of lines I shamelessly nicked from an actual small child I heard this morning, but ...

Nothing really to say, but you give me shivers in all the places good writing does.

Jemaia is all I see these days. Sometimes I think I need to follow more people, and then I realise that would mean less concentrated Jemaia.

Thanks for your review, World! I'm glad you liked it :) The dialogue is definitely going up for rewrite - that seems to be something everyone agrees on!

Hey Kafka. Thanks for your review! I agree completely about the length, and about the song - the lyrics are actually in line to be the first thing I cut ...

Targuini! Ohdearlord you have a headcanon for us xD I totally get what you mean about the choppiness and the angst - making notes to deal with that now! And ...

Cutting it fine there, Bleusy! I admit it: the lyric is only in there because I wound up writing something so far from the song and felt I ought to ...