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I don't think it's so much a matter of it sounding "poemy", as what makes a poem a poem means different things to different people. I'm talking about it sounding ...

Hey bess-bess, just did a quick edit for you. Please don't put your title in all caps! It's more annoying than an attention-grabber. :wink: -Colleen

I'm going to lock this, as you also posted it in the NaPoWriMo forum. Please only post your poems for NaPo in there from now on, and welcome to YWS! ...

Just stop and think of how life's fair. either you need to stop this line right after 'stop' or put in a comma to add emphasis Actually, inndysgirl, the line ...

A bump is a bump. If you really want your piece to get some comments, you could ask a friend or an instructor, for example, to critique it. And in ...

My god, it is incredible and refreshing to see a comment from Brad that doesn't say, "This is a sorry attempt. Toss it." It is rare, in fact, to see ...

Please, for goodness' sake, don't use archaic language if you don't even know how. "Thy" is possessive. You meant "thee". Beyond that it strikes me as pretty much a Twilight-fangirl-squee ...

I've always really liked the story. We make a big deal out of it at my high school because Shirley Jackson went there. Every year the library puts up a ...

In reply I think I'll just show you on the poem. Obviously what I've cropped may not always be cropped cleanly, but I think you get the idea: all you ...

Thanks for the comments, guys! (In case anyone doesn't know who Mathew Brady is...he was a Civil War photographer. Obviously the Civil War was the first conflict in American history ...

No, smorg, I wouldn't define it as prose-poetry either. And yes, RIP could be a prose-poem if I took the line breaks out, which I've considered doing. I just don't ...

Rating changed to R for language.

I edited your title so that it's not in all caps. Please refrain from doing that; it's not the right way to get attention. You might also consider removing the ...

The second and third lines don't match the limerick format at all... Other than that, it's cute, even if it is slightly violent. I second Via--she cries before and after ...

This is the most worthless piece of crap EVER. No OMG I loved it, I really did, Matt. Snoink, good luck and much...fertility...make pig babies!