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Chandni makes an excellent point. Rome and Romania are hardly the same thing.

Sophie - I changed the "in". I kind of like it up there on the line before. Thanks for the comments! Colly

Thanks for the reply. It's actually not a beginning, it's just meant to stand alone, although I see where you're coming from with that idea. Regarding the "You're ruining the ...

Yay for editing! *gives another cookie* I see, so you meant the repetition of "burn" to be blatant? I'm not sure if I like them split up, then. If you ...

Thanks for all the replies! I recently submitted this piece to the Gannon University poetry contest. :D I definitely agree with the sentiments expressed about the last line; it is ...

This was very good. I was a little surprised. (No offense) Most guys don't write Romantic stories. Haha, maybe Cameron's really a girl...but I jest, anyone can write romantic fiction, ...

Brad and Clau - Colleen is spelled with two e's. If you leave one out, it sounds like Collin, which is a boy's name, whereas I am happily female. Yes, ...

As others have said, don't take critiques personally. If the poem means something to you, I'm all for that. Writing poetry to express emotion can be very therapeutic. Still, posting ...

*pats Clau's head* No need to hate your poetry! No, it wasn't the best, but it was a good idea, so hang on to it and rewrite it in six ...

The first line drew me in right away. It sets down the basic idea for the rest of the poem and laid down something concrete, this pen drawing bit. Okay, ...

Well, it's similar to House, and your avatar encourages that sense, Brad. I know I said that Jon crying is un-House-like, but I know that they're separate characters and have ...

Excellent job editing the first stanza! In the second stanza: The "polish" part is still a bit iffy. I like that you put the last two questions on separate lines, ...

Changed! Thanks for the advice. Well, I don't know if the change is what you were looking for, but it's no longer "bubbled". I was surprised that people had an ...

I'm not sure I understand the reference to Babylon though. Explain? Ha, though I'm entirely against people defending their work, I'm going to explain Babylon. Erm...I wrote this after studying ...

No more caps in odd places! I love you! This poem has been greatly improved. And yet I see a beauty in her half-finished form, in the dead flesh sprawled ...