Cade

I rather liked this one; I think its strongest point was the imagery; I could really feel the sun and the cold. Those situations were described really well. It seems, ...

The excessive and slightly sickening use of a large vocabulary serves to make it funny, but that seems to be as far as it goes. I did like the last ...

This is a very interesting message, and it reminds me of this book I read when I was younger called "Seeing the Blue Between." The real problem here was that ...

This poem didn't bring anything new to the table. It's rather flat, a little too straightforward, a little too broad. Most of the phrases in here are things we've all ...

Hmm, I say leave the "and take". I really liked this. Good idea! I wonder why it's "Ice Castle"? From that title, I expected something rather like a fairy tale. ...

Ooh, nice. I like how the title is so simple and explains a rather cryptic poem. I felt that the rhyme wasn't quite...obvious...enough. Of course, rhyme should be subtle, but ...

I'm sure she's adorable! Thing is, the descriptions here are kind of commonplace. She's cooing, twinkling, precious. We've heard it all before when people talk about babies. And then, the ...

I know that threads are a colloquial term for clothes! Still, terms like that are generally reserved for first person narratives or dialogue. Pushing through the tangled mesh of wreckage ...

I agree with Chibi, punctuation would be nice, but first I think you need to seriously reconsider what you're doing with this poem. Though I sympathize with people who are ...

Oh, yes, I agree with Brad! I was going to tell you to erase the last stanza entirely, but I see he got to it first. I am, however, opposed ...

All winter we’ve watched this journey Who is "we"? She unbuttons, lets her braid dangle The way this is phrased makes it sound like the braid dangling is a result ...

Jimmy makes an excellent point! An ending like that would be much less expected and therefore, more effective. "Before you insult someone, you should walk a mile in his shoes. ...

I'm afraid adding structure in this instance would be more like adding a $30 steak to a plateful of ketchup. Best, Trident Did Trident just pull a Brad? Anyway, I ...

This is not of ee cummings quality, if that's what you were aiming for. This seems to be some sort of strange attempt at experimental poetry that has lost me ...

Very whimsical. It's odd, but adorably so. Perhaps like Dr. Seuss: "One fish, two fish, red fish, blue fish." There's obviously not much you're trying to say here. It just ...