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I have to say I like it. Phorcys may have a point in that the waking-up-in-a-torture-room narrative is a little overdone, but it was well-written enough to overcome that. I ...

This is a decent essay. It flows well while efficiently disclosing information. Your main problems are mainly in syntax and grammar and all that--I'm just going to correct them here. ...

I'm not really sure what to think of it, Cameron. I enjoyed the imagery, but as far as I can tell, this poem has little or no point. It displays ...

Love is cliche....but so is this poem. Only the ending really struck me as something interesting. I think this has the potential to be much improved, though; this poem should ...

Wow, Brad went on a critiquing binge today! I'd have to agree with him. I think this topic could be pulled off, but you need a little more practice. It's ...

I rather enjoyed it. It made me think of Walt Whitman's "Song of Myself", especially III. I disagree with Brad's comment on the speaker's confusion--I think that, for the mots ...

I really like this...the first stanza especially pulled me in. At first thought, it seemed like a cliche sort of image, because poems about memory so often involve beaches, but ...

Oooh, I agree with elephantwalrus...excellent job of putting another meaning into the phrase "grim reaper". It was a very clever, original poem. I like it! My main problem is that ...

might be a prose-poem? Poetry or not, I take issue with this because I don't know why I'm reading it. What does it mean? What sort of conclusion shall I ...

Hi there! I see that you're new, so I just want to make sure you know a very important rule around here. Please critique two pieces before you post your ...

Haha, did you mean to put "The Heart of the Heave m s" in the subject line? This really appealed to me; I do enjoy seeing suicide written about in ...

Man once worshipped me They offered sweet sacrifices to me Beautiful tokens of love put out for me They put down their very lives to me. I think you should ...

I agree; the sentences were choppy and you weren't very articulate in expressing emotion. Structure and Tone. Poets can use sentence structure and tone to their advantage; here, I don't ...

You have an interesting premise here; I definitely know what you're talking about because I moved from a rural area to the suburbs when I was ten. You have some ...

...I, too, went "FTW!" the second I saw this. My main problem with this poem is that it doesn't sound like a poem. It sounds like prose. What's worse, it ...