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Nah, cliches don't really make me cry. DO: Make your poem original. Read lots of good poetry. Use interesting images or metaphors. DON'T: Construct your poem from Hallmark cards. If ...

This poem strikes me as a bunch of abstract concepts and very angry words all thrown together. It doesn't strike me as poetry. It seems like you took some sort ...

Now this green heart thing makes sense, with the artichoke...Melja, I do love your style, but I definitely don't like Part Four as much as the others. It's just not ...

Next time, keep it in your journal. The thing is, we as readers don't really care. Why should we want to read about the speaker's failed relationship and her hopeless ...

*labels with the big red EMO stamp* Originality. It's okay to write about death and despair and whatnot, but you've got to do it in a way that's new and ...

This poem suffers because of its rhyme scheme...it's a great thing to practice, but you don't want your poem to revolve around its structure. As Sydney pointed out, it seems ...

I find that my life has been lost – all I recorded on sad scraps of hotel paper has found its home under Oxford-clad feet: between the rich and the ...

The problem here is that the poem's message is awfully tired. I think as writers we've heard all the dreamy idealistic stuff before..."Poetry is when you pour out your emotions ...

Formatting. The bolded words are not necessary...phrases that are meant to be emphasized should stand alone. Description versus message. The poem's main problem is that it's centered on description. T

This is not a poem, it is an outburst with line breaks. For all our sakes, keep it in your journal. Regarding swearing--"bitch" was only there for shock value, and ...

I definitely second Meep. Your basic emo poem. Next time, write about something you can really talk about, something you know and can discuss in a unique fashion. Please don't ...

If you were trying to write a 5-7-5 haiku, you might take note that your second line has, in fact, eight syllables. I agree with Via--it doesn't say much, but ...

This reads like a pop song. That's not really a good thing. Basically, if you took out all the cliches, it might...oh, wait, never mind, if you take out all ...

I agree with Rjjr_vectra. This is completely self-absorbed and belongs in a diary or a pop song. Remember that in poetry it's okay to talk about yourself, but you can't ...

I'm assuming that you're trying to say something about Leonardo Da Vinci, but the parallels aren't quite clear enough for me to see...I'm afraid I don't understand the poem. I ...