Button

Honestly, I think it's really good. I love the content, the concept... wonderful piece. However, and this is probably going to sound a little weird, the language sounds odd to ...

Okay, so first of all, I'm assuming these are lyrics, rather than lyric poetry? mmm...mmm...mhm mmm...mmm...mhm I don't really think you need to write these in- if you're singing it, ...

I adore this. I think that maybe you have little too much description in the beginning, and that you could perhaps explain how the whole thing happened, but this was ...

This was really interesting- I think that I would try to incorporate more of the breathing emotions wise with your figurative language and everything in the fourth stanza- that's where ...

I really like this- it has wonderful simplicity, and your language is very colorful and descriptive without being overbearing. However, I liked the first stanza the best. Towards the end, ...

Cool idea- you should look at your grammar though, because the way this is written seems almost like an outline more than a story. Also, I would consider establishing relationships ...

This was freakin' awesome. Hilarious. I don't really have a real review for you- sorry. This was just amazing. I love the humor, and it's actually all extremely logical if ...

as the sky unravels its chemise of cirrus, you say that a man’s bare torso is flexed on the full moon, his limbs flung outward in the languor of the ...

You would probably call it my wrong turn[b](comma here) but (capital I) i say that it was fate for me to walk on that road again. That cold dark road ...

Really interesting piece- I would consider lengthening your vocabulary in it, and maybe going through for some different punctuation. Poems composed primarily of questions generally irk me to no end, ...

I don't know fate works, but I do know it likes to be funny. Wonderful opening line- it's interesting, grabs the reader, without actually limiting your piece to some type ...

I remember you walking through the door. You were a mess, all tangles and grime and tears. And your pretty little shoes, they had gotten so dirty out in the ...

This was freakin' intense. I got to the end and was like... "ZOMBIES?!" But, seeing that I love zombies and whatnot (Shaun of the Dead ftw), I read through it ...

Can you remember the day? The day we met, the warm september breeze swarming over the gaggle of students. Swarming is a bit of a weird description for a breeze. ...

Sorry that all happened to you. :/ 7th grade is the time that all that stuff started happening around me. It was crazy times, but it slowly balanced out and ...