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Refresh the spirit Renew your soul Nice opening lines- they're catching, but can still open up into a lot of different possibilities. Face your dread Don't fear it Find new ...

A knife wedged in a wedding cake is a realist view of the world. This is an extremely choppy stanza, and it kind of spells out the rest of the ...

This is awesome. I read it when you first posted it, looked at the first four lines, heavily sighed, and hit the back button. When I saw it was featured ...

I think this was wonderful- probably (no, definitely) my favorite poem from you so far. The first two lines kind of lost me a little bit, but when I read ...

I love this- how you punctuated the last bits with "damn" and were so creative in your descriptions and andorbut-ing. Excellent piece altogether. :) Some Nitpicks: The descriptions of the ...

There was an unexpected burst of cold wind from the east that suddenly put a chill in the air. Maybe that ___ a sudden chill in the air? I think ...

Creep slowly eyes down waiting to eat golden steel. Cracked knuckles and teeth made of wood. All of this is beautiful language and beautiful imagery- but it isn't actually doing ...

Early sunset amoungst there's no "u" in "amongst" purple moors. Metaphorically speaking, what is this supposed to represent? (I'm not challenging, just curious c: ) They catch alight in the ...

First of all, I would suggest splitting these up into smaller chapters, just for reviewing-it makes it easier, and the less daunting it looks, the more review you'll get. Second ...

Hands These are my hands. I lay them open before you, vulnerable, honest; because you need to see them. I think that you could omit "because" and maybe say "I ...

Interesting piece, but the words themselves are a little too simplistic for me- I would suggest broadening the vocabulary a bit to make it really interesting, and maybe include some ...

Definitely emotional, I'll give you that: but, you needed to do more showing than telling, especially towards the beginning. Maybe leave the face that they committed suicide until the end ...

First time writing poetry. Maybe a colon instead of a period, just to make the flow better, except of course if you want that to go along with the next ...

I really don't know how I feel about this- I feel like the concept is interesting, but feels too forced because it's so concentrated in such a short piece. This ...

Hi! It’s not only Hannah Montana who has a double side but Professor Snape too. It was a dull afternoon, Gryffindor and Hufflepuff had a combined Defense against the Dark ...