Burrow

Thanks for the review, firstly I Ow you a coke. Next I tend to give as little imformation, but you find out later, I should take out that narrator bit ...

Ill try and fix it up thanks for the review!

I really liked how you wrote this story, and I really want to read more, but there was a few things that I suggest you change. The name for one, ...

Also, I am working on getting better at showing not telling, I always remind myself when I write, slowly improving...

Thanks for the review. Firstly thanks so much for the grammar tips, I will try and get to them soon. Next they show the video to spick his emotion. They ...

Thanks for this review it really helped me, ive been working on grammar with my dad, and I am slowly getting better!!

He uses gravity to knock them over. Thanks for the review!!

Thanks, I will think about this. I' m already up to chapter 15 for burrow, just not posting it, I'm doing it for NaNo

Its my pleasure

I loved this so much, please keep me posted if you will write more!! Jack

Thanks ill get to those problems as soon as I can :)

haha I only joined today, I didn't bother I just wrote first haha, already up to 5000 not so good actually..

Thanks, will get to fixing it when I can, but im behind scheduale on nano thing :(

Um both times you mentioned things that were intentional. And I do try and go over it, but I am not perfect. I would also be more helpful if you ...

Thanks