Bugslake

This is really good and I really like the fact that you gave us a cliff hanger so that we will keep reading. Your main character is amazing, I just ...

This is really good and I could totally see this song as one of the top ten. You describe the sadness of love truly well. Sorry it seems like everyone ...

This is a very good beginning to a story. It has some real potential and I can't wait to see what comes next. It flowed smoothly and I couldn't see ...

Yeah, it seems like it is only about one thing. Personally this isn't my favorite literature, but the details were nice. I actually recommend making it have a stronger rating. ...

This is really accurate and I felt that I was a fellow spartan among the spartan army. I flowed smoothly an was easy to read. Although, there was a lot ...

I have kept reading as I said I would. I am very happy with this chapter, you just keep developing your characters in amazing ways. This is really good and ...

I love the fact that we can understand the character's pain in this one. We can completely understand what it's like knowing and loving someone than having your heart ripped ...

I agree with iheartbooks, this piece is a bit choppy and it is kind of hard to imagine it with words. You need to keep it flowing and moving in ...

This is really good and I can relate to it. Many a times I have felt this way in my life. It flows very smoothly and we understand what you ...

This is really good, but I felt that the different parts of who was talking was very choppy. You should try and make it smoother. I can really connect with ...

This is really cute and adorable. I just wish that you hadn't gone so fast. It was just so quick for the whole connection thing. If you took longer, the ...

You have wonderfully described how I have felt at times. Many readers can relate to this piece of literature. You have described how hard it is to have a crush ...

I love what you've done here. You've created a story with the main character being a twelve year old that only knows military strategy. Then he is sent to a ...

I really like this idea. I like how your characters have been well thought out. It was a bit choppy with the speech and the ideas weren't really coherent. That ...

This is more of just an idea than a story. Obviously this is very short. There isn't really any plot here, just you making a sequence for a story. This ...