Bugslake

This is a unique story. I would really like to know why this girl Dawn, is writing this testimony. The beginning is kind of slow because the character takes to ...

This sounds like this assassin could be a really cool vigilanty if he/she were good. There are some missing capitals on some words. There are also words that have been ...

This is a very interesting beginning to a story that could be very good. There are points in the story where I don't know what's going on and it's mostly ...

This is a really good start to a story. I love the thought that women are pretty much in charge of hell. I am really sorry, but I don't know ...

I have been in this situation and it really does suck, but what I do is I bury the pain way deep down in the darkest part of my heart ...

Hey I always love scary stories, but it was hard to follow this one because there weren't any new paragraph each time you had a new thought. Every time you ...

Hey, this is a very good start to a story that could be absolutely amazing. Can't wait to read the next part of this. I do have to say that ...

This is a totally interesting character designs. I love the way you have thought about your characters, where they would be, and what they would be doing. There are some ...

This is the most amazing beginning to a story that I have ever read. There's so much detail and so much emotion within every word that it surprises me. There ...

I'm guessing that you agree at all with abortion, but I don't think that you should turn into a thing of hate and fear, but whatever. There are some times ...

I agree with emjayc, a blog could totally be your thing. There are some point when you Change subject meaning that you should also create a new paragraph. There are ...

This is the perfect creepy story. Definitely hit the creepy, stalker like thinking on the button. I really hope that it is not from experience. Just kidding, maybe. Anyway there ...

I definitely love your main character. Molls, strong on the surface but intricate underneath with feelings. I am so glad that you made this apocalypse plot and story interesting, I ...

I like the fact that you've thought your character through. It's times like these that I accidentally begin to think and act like my character. It is somewhat hard for ...

This is a very good beginning to a story that could really see some real compliments. I really like the contrast between Elouise and Thomas. It shows how much disorder ...