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Re: Chapter 1 -The New Age
This is an interesting concept. There are some grammatical errors, and the way you described certain things was hard for a reader like me to fully understand. Honestly though, I ...
Sat Jul 05, 2014 2:59 pm -
Re: I wrote this when we were dumb and happy together
I agree with @cleverclogs, this is a beautiful piece with a great story. It is almost wishful how it is written. I don't understand how you think this isn't good. ...
Wed May 21, 2014 10:23 pm -
Re: SF Chapter 1
This is very muddled. When a different person speaks they need to have their own paragraph. I know that doing that is a lot of more work, but in the ...
Tue May 20, 2014 5:30 am -
Re: Euterpe Chapter 2
I really like this story, you know what I had an idea like this but I couldn't get it to paper right. You have definitely done a really good job ...
Tue May 20, 2014 12:28 am -
Re: Ruthless Killer | Unedited
Well, this was definitely really good and I want to read more. I so want to read what had happened to JD's mate and why she killed him. This was ...
Wed May 14, 2014 6:25 pm -
Re: Chelsea's Friends (sneak peek into first chapter, let me know how it is.)
Well, this is an interesting chapter. I guess it's just that I never knew how someone would feel if no one in their life really wanted them to be around. ...
Thu May 08, 2014 4:28 am -
Re: Lost Magic. Chapter 2.
I have to say that the main thing that I noticed was that each sentence began with I. Don't gets wrong, I do this a lot as well, but it ...
Wed May 07, 2014 4:19 am -
Re: The Chosen
Off you kept going with this it would make an interesting story. The way their relationship is described makes me want to understand their backstory more. I want to know ...
Sat Apr 05, 2014 3:53 am -
Re: The Limitations of Life
Well, I've finally decided to review one of your works. You're slightly lucky because I don't like reviewing poems on a regular bases unless I understand them. So today I ...
Fri Apr 04, 2014 5:21 pm -
Re: .
I really loved this essay. It is something that everyone should know in this moral changing world. Many don't understand the consequences of their actions when it comes to this. ...
Sat Mar 29, 2014 2:39 pm -
Re: Wages: Chapter Eleven
Found the Providers name, it's Zarr. I'm actually really happy with this chapter even though you may not be. It covered everything that had been left hanging from the last ...
Wed Mar 26, 2014 12:02 am -
Re: The Hybrids (Chapter 8)
I read this before now, I was just to lazy to write a review. Again amazing work, I especially loved when she explained why she was okay. I'm not to ...
Sat Mar 15, 2014 2:08 pm -
Re: Fly
Sorry my comment was supposed to be a review so here it goes the second time. Hopefully this will be enough words to be considered a review. Again amazing talent ...
Fri Mar 14, 2014 10:15 pm -
Re: Chapter 4: Three Weeks Left
I've tried writing something like this several times, but I end up failing miserably because I make everything progress to fast. You, you were able to create this story and ...
Fri Mar 14, 2014 5:10 pm -
Re: According To... Chapter 1: Glassy Memories (Allana)
This is really interesting. There are a couple of mistakes where words are spelled incorrectly and some words should be replaced by others. The flow is really good and we ...
Fri Mar 14, 2014 5:06 pm
