BrumalHunter

Salutations I realise it was more than a month ago when I last said I would review your chapter, but it appears I focused on reviewing only during my first ...

Salutations Your story is off to a good start. I've been reading second and third chapters the whole day long, and I've noticed that some of those maintain your attention ...

Salutations I like how your chapter immediately grabs the reader's attention and get to the point. We are told what circumstances would normally be, and then why they aren't that ...

Salutations As far as first sentences go, "It is the middle of the night" isn't very original. The reason? Its effectiveness. You see, people automatically associate midnight with evil and ...

Salutations The story you have written thus far is interesting, even if I don't like the protagonist much (who does like an arrogant person anyway?), but what worries my is ...

Salutations I see you are a fellow circumlotionist. Yes, I too am guilty of being longwinded and writing more than is necessary (as this part of the sentence illustrates), which ...

Salutations I am always happy to assist a team mate. I read that English isn't your home language, so I shall refrain from commenting about things such as spelling and ...

Salutations I am glad I have the honour of reviewing a fellow Ketchup enthusiast's chapter! Since you said that you have not yet edited or revised this chapter, I shall ...

Salutations After reading just a few paragraphs, I can see why people want you to continue writing. In the first three, for example, the character is only batting away snowflakes. ...

Salutations. Coldware ← what an interesting title. I love wordplay, so naturally, I would review this.However, when read along with this chapter individually, it also seems ironic: I cannot think ...

Salutations. I see chapter two - I am currently reading it, so that much is obvious - but where is chapter one? I cannot see it in the sidebar. Maybe ...

Salutations. Darth TimmyJake asked me to review this for Kickstart a full month ago already, so I must apologise that I am only getting around to it now. I see ...

Salutations It's a pity I cannot review the second part as well, but you did say you were unsatisfied with the end, so I shall happily review it once you ...

Salutations. Wanderer, my dear friend, this truly is a marvelous work. As I told you today, I suck at writing poetry - although you will not know that for a ...

Salutations I realise it has been some time since you last received a review from me, but I have finally returned! My Legend: Red - correction Orange - suggestion Green ...