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Hey Look Here Some Words Are Shooting Your Way So, like...don't force rhymes, if you don't have to. Your language doesn't bring anything to mind, and so the "light" repetition ...

Hey Here Are Some Words First stanza doesn't anything striking about it that would require fixing. Very solid opening, flowing naturally in this format. Her parting shall forever part thy ...

Hey I'm Gonna Look At Your Poem and Say Things my body he made still like someone struck with a spell. So, this line breaks the flow rather early for ...

To be quite blunt i’de like to point out to lillymoore that poetry is not an art of correctness, i think by saying the sight of laughter your creating this ...

Er, first Wall-O-text...use the enter key, please >.> Over all, I thought it was pretty good. The flow was pretty good, though the whole no spacing made it a bit ...

I really hope this is a joke Poem, if not...well..... Not much I can say. I mean, this is hardly even...anything at all. You can;t review gibberish, because you can't ...

I'm a be hard on this The diamond girl was flawless, her form and gait pristine. God made her eyes from stars and seas, and stroked his jealousy. Nice meter, ...

Hey-O, let's go, with Bolt, the lame 80s surf lingo. First off I liked your consistency in this poem. It kept to it's dark tone the whole time, which I ...

oi its hard on the ipod! copying it up on comp tomorra .:)) Quick tip...not the best idea to write a story on the spot, on your Ipod, and then ...

Wait, did you just review the story, or did you just review El's review on it? I mean disagreeing is one thing, but saying every line of your review "She ...

First thought for this is boring. Sorry but this just didn't interest me in anyway at all. After the first paragraph, I really wanted to X out but I kept ...

Don;t really have too much to say about this. All I can really say is Bravo. This kept me interested even with mostly description and non character interactive action (which ...

First off, I agree with Sela. You need a better opening, something that draws the reader in more. I always find the word job making me think beck to reality ...

The only reason I read these books is because the same author wrote The Power of Five series, which I love. I liked the first three books, but after that ...

I wouldn't use odd to describe it...but for lack of a better word. The poem was interesting, it made me laugh a few times, just because of the words you ...