Blackwood

This is incredibly hooking! Usually when I am about to read a short story, I read the first two lines. If I am tentative of if I will like it ...

You have so much speech lines where you missed. It looks terrible. YOU ALWAYS HAVE TO START SPEECH ON A NEW LINE. Ok As I was reading this I decided ...

When you write a short story you write for a purpose. When you start you think to yourself. "After the reader reads this, what do I want them to think? ...

This was a much better one than the comma one. One issue I have is that your examples, especially the last one, are far too long. Sometimes it makes me ...

Hello there. I'm sure everyone has mentioned this already but fix your I's and all. When I read this I feel like I want something more poetic. I feel that ...

I really like your words, they sound nice together, but thats as far as I can say, since I don't understand any of it XD Asking for nitpicks is going ...

Hmmm Lets see. I was worried about this being terribly cliche, with the vampires and all, but it ended up quite nicely, without some 'cool' or 'savage' vampires sneaking around ...

To my dearest and most gorgeous Writey I understand that you have removed this piece for the time being, however it is trapped in the greenroom because no one can ...

You are writing an informative piece here, yet you completely confuse your readers with your examples. You use your example by naming the character "Said Character" This is an incredibly ...

D: D: D: D: The first three lines made me cry. More heartbreaking than Titanic and other 'sad' things. This poem was incredible. I must say, it is very well ...

As per requested- a review for you. When starting a story as such as this, there is one thing that throws the reader into the deep end, which unfortunately you ...

You have raided the green room, spammed your works into infinity from free work day. You are insane. “Where are we going?” she yelled as they ran past the twin ...

It's!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Anyway. The sky is all cleared up now. This line. This line was blah. It was so simple compared to the rest of your lines. I found your descriptions ...

Nice and short and you have some great imagery in here. I like it. The first two lines are my favourites, they describe the fire in a light way and ...

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HI. Biggest issue here is capital letters. TOO MANY CAPITAL LETTERS. Ah. Too many. You make almost every word a proper noun, its not. You may have turned these ...