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Re: Scotch
Hey there. Why is this is poetry? It is most certainly a short story. First thing I noticed was this: I can hear and it is heard when it wishes ...
Sep 13, 2013 -
Re: Son of a Killer ch2
Good evening! I have read this second chapter now. A quick question I have for you is that did you change the kids being killed to being segregated? As an ...
Sep 13, 2013 -
Re: knots
Punctuation baby They line up bricks and stencil walls that say , “conundrum of politics . ” I guess I’m to simple of a person to understand , but I ...
Sep 9, 2013 -
Re: stars
What was I saying before? Sexy poet. Here is a proper review. You have a good way with words, nice flow, and a voice which is great for a poet. ...
Sep 6, 2013 -
Re: Son of a Killer ch1
Hey there, you have some nice writing style here but before much is said about that I just want to point out something to you. I am mainly basing this ...
Sep 5, 2013 -
Re: Little Chimney (Draft)
Looks like your image code didn't really work out, oh well, that's not the important part anyway. Firstly, before I sing you songs of praise, I would like to inquire ...
Sep 2, 2013 -
Re: "Vicky...Not so Icky?" Part Two.
I'm just going to keep on reading because they're so entertaining. I found the end a bit strange though? Why would Vicky play hide and seek? I expected him to ...
Aug 29, 2013 -
Re: Hidden in a Lie Prologue
Looks like you had a bit of a formatting problem with the publishing center. You may want to go have another shot at fixing it up. Now, your writing seems ...
Aug 28, 2013 -
Re: Jerry
Hey buddy, here to review. I like the opening paragraph, in the car, it makes sense and flows along nicely, yet I suddenly stop and get confused. The country club ...
Aug 27, 2013 -
Re: Society Wins
Hello hello. I will give you a review. It took me a little bit to get into this, but by the end I was satisfied with your idea you have ...
Aug 26, 2013 -
Re: Amy.
Hello, review for you. I read this when I saw the name of some instruments, hoping that if you were a non musician I could catch you out and give ...
Aug 26, 2013 -
Re: I Wanted
I like the irony, and I do admit, you do touch on a big cliche at the end. I think that personally, you should have wrapped it up humorously, getting ...
Aug 25, 2013 -
Re: Death Through Boredom
hey there. I really liked this poem and I think you pulled it off well. I am sad that you didn't take the chance to use the word shame as ...
Aug 25, 2013 -
Re: Savior
Hey there. the imagery in this is really great and full to the brim. It may be slightly overwhelming at times. i think that if you you put in more ...
Aug 25, 2013 -
Re: Psychohomichlophobia
I really like this, the use of long words which slowly become more and more crazy, then finally merging the scientific with some religious proclamations really makes an impact. I ...
Aug 25, 2013
