Bivrax

Thank you so much! I actually don't write that much, if you can believe me. I'm only pretty good because the stories are always in my mind, but it's hard ...

Thanks! I can see where you pointed out I can improve, and I agree. I also expected all those grammar issues. Thanks for the review, again!

No problem! I really liked it, actually. Probably one of the best stories I've read on here since I joined a few days ago. I can't wait to read more ...

Sorry, but with that length, I didn't get to read it all. Just bein' honest here...

Yeah, sometimes I will write in a not-me style.

Sorry, but I very much disliked this. I didn't get the point. I only got violence stuck in my head. It's also is some way depressing to me.

Thanks for the review. I don't know why, but when I write what I think, this is what comes out. Usually, anyway, I end up with some kind of warped, ...

Amazing, also moving. I loved it. It was all-out beautiful. Everything was so simple, it hooked me. I read it in just over a minute, I'm guessing. You did a ...

I liked it. Very simple. Easy to follow. Just what I'm looking for. I can tell you didn't try and be all fancy. You just wrote how you felt. Even ...

Part of why I liked this, is because I love pizza. I also liked it because it is very simple (in my mind, at least) and is very easy to ...

I think it was pretty good. It had some nice descriptions, that gave it a calm feel to it... besides the corpses floating down stream.

I thought... That this was amazing. I don't know why though. It just appealed to me, in an unusual way.

Luci, why did you feel the need to quote all of that? Um, sorry. I do think the story was pretty good.

I think it was pretty good. And yes, paragraph spacing would help.

I agree. I think that a bit less details, and you'll be good to go. Sometimes if you have too much details, the reader can forget what they're actually reading ...