BigBadBear

Hey! Thanks for submitting this chapter! I found it really interesting. It was. It kept my interest all the way through until the end. I really liked it. Like the ...

Hey! I'm here, just like I said I would be! And there's no need to be shy! Ask for all the crits you want! And I'm sure that I'll read ...

Awesome! I can't wait to get reading. After the first part of "Diary of a Villian" I know that this will be awesome. Ok, now for the crit: Had someone ...

Hey! I will be doing a crit for every part, so expect some crits soon! (Note that I haven’t read over the other crits, so sorry if I repeat anything!) ...

Green trees white snow red blood! I think what's wrong with this sentence is that there isn't punctuation. Maybe put in commas? Dashes? Something. :wink: Hey! I agree with Azila, ...

Hey, Via! Well, this was rather touching. Mostly because I can relate to it. Not that he died or anything... I still can't believe it. The ending was amazing. Sometimesinbetween ...

Hey, Via! Well, I'm usually not one to read/crit poetry, but this caught my eye. After reading it, I really liked it. You have great talent for poetry. Today she ...

First dibs!! Whatever it was, it wasn’t on my Christmas list. XD I watched her stick the bows on top of the colorful gifts until there [s]was[/s] were no more. ...

Whoa! Dude! That last part was amazing! I loved it! There was only one sentence that made no sense to me: All his strength let him do was object with ...

Wow. Yeah. That's what I said when I finished this. Wow. This was so cool! You really made us feel for the narrator, and it was all in all wonderful. ...

Heylo, again! Sorry it took so long to get on! I was expecting this crit to take a while, but no. Esme caught everything... So... This chapter confused me like ...

*sorry, I couldn't get to this earlier!* Boring? Not a cliffhanger? Whadda smoking, kid? Ok, yeah, I'll have to admit that this wasn't my favorite. I didn't know what was ...

Awesome! But, make sure that you only post one chapter a day. It's a rule. Ok, on to the crit! They pounced [s]at[/s] on him [s]but[/s] before he could move, ...

Awesome! I love this story. It's freaking awesome. Now, on to the crit: After a heave , Aedomir stood on the rocky ground, leaning against the boulder. Comma after heave. ...

Shucks. I couldn't find a single stupid thing wrong with this. Grammar wise. Grr... your writing is so incredible to read. It's fun and super awesome. Your descriptions are so ...