Bella

I wanted to start off by saying that I like this piece, and I think it has a lot of potential. But I can't find the emotion in it. To ...

I'm impressed! Judging from personal experience, I feel like you've done a wonderful job capturing the (sadly disillusioned) mind of an abuser. My eyes gaze down at your body. Broken, ...

Hi there! I'm Bella and I'm here to review your poem! =) I'm going to make a few suggestions and comments, and then apply them to the poem (at least, ...

Hello there! I'm Bella, and I'm here to review your poem! I hope that's okay =) I'd like to start with the title - it should be grateful . Now, ...

I read through this piece a few times before deciding that I really just don't feel it. I don't feel the emotion in it. It's like...the victim of a rape ...

Two can play at this game. Or at least one can win. If two are playing, only one can actually win? At least, that's what I think. Maybe change this ...

I'm going to start with some suggestions and "nitpicks", as lily called them. The blade. I wouldn't capitalize blade - it doesn't symbolize anything, it really is just a blade. ...

Close your eyes, still your breath, The night's swift call beseeches you. A rhythmic dream draws you to death, As time’s embrace holds strong and true. I walk with you ...

It made me want to cry... But that's a good thing, really. You did a good job of putting a conversational tone into it, while still putting all the emotion ...

Dood, how did I only just now find this? O.o Anyway, Wuthering Heights is pretty much one of my all time favorite books ever. One of the few that dad ...

Hm... I really like this. Although the ending, just the very last line, didn't fit right in my opinion. Maybe something like: "I wish you could be that someone." I ...

Woot! Breaking Dawn! I loved it, but it made me sad. It was sad to see Edward and Bella go. Kind of like when I finished Harry Potter - I ...

First off, welcome to YWS! If you have any questions about anything, feel free to PM me, and I'll do whatever I can to help you. Now, on to the ...

My dear Ashleylee - this was AMAZING! No joke, you had me near tears. I was very very upset. (and I'm completely heartless, so it's pretty hard to get me ...

Wow, I loved this! I had a pretty hard time just reading it and giving a good crit though, because a lot of things I noticed were more nitpicky things. ...