Becky2421

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Hey there myjaspercat (interesting name, username?) Here for a brief review darling. Got to admit that though you have written this poem 5 months ago (just took me 5 minutes ...

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Hey there myjaspercat (interesting name, username?) Here for a brief review darling. Got to admit that though you have written this poem 5 months ago (just took me 5 minutes ...

Damn racket! your one hot reviewer! First of all, i do agree about the way i ended my poem. I wasn't really satisfied with the end for it needed to ...

First of all MergSword, This is not about a mermaid. Just to be clear, this is about a boy admiring a graceful female swimmer. So he is in the crowd ...

Thanks for your suggestions. But i'll have to disagree with 'the' before 'surface' because it still makes sense without it. It wouldn't give the poem that spice i intended to ...

Yep! will gave a great day Cheers!

Thanks! Will consider this. Cheers! :)

Gee thanks! Haha...Will consider the lengthy recommendation. Cheers!

Cheers girl!

Totally love the two first lines! Attention catcher that is! It gave the poem a good start and enlightened the whole poem. The sea crawls out, Still under the skies ...

I see you've got your skin under my compelling poem...haha okay thanks for your comment. And also thats my fav part too :) cheers

Thanks will consider your recommendation! I see what you mean by increasing the impact which you were referring to the rhythm and flow of words.

@acm about the first stanza and second stanza thingy, the line 'they were not perfect' meant not by appearance but their relationship between each other. But thanks anyways!Cheers!

mmm...WOW! Nice chose of descriptive words. A very detailed and descriptive scene. Very captivating indeed. A little bit of humour had spiced the story too. :)