BechtelAuthor

Oh. New author I see. It's okay, I was new to writing once too, but I started off on fanfaction and that's where I mastered the skills. I'm going to ...

Some corrections. Most of these are really minor, but everyone likes hearing about their mistakes. A few things I noticed about your writing. 1) You're trying to write in present ...

Just a few spelling mistakes. "Cabot led them forward, and as they walked, THEY grayness seemed to get farther away," Replace "they" with "the". "Cool,” said Jay, adding that to ...

It was a pretty good transition from human to monster overall. I know it was on purpose but it was completely lacking in detail, but I liked it that way. ...

I don't usually read poetry and came by this on pure accident. It was a pleasant surprise. I write and read novels so I'm not entirely sure about the rules ...

All right. This is pretty cool. You just earned yourself a follower. I do have a few questions and suggestions. About the antagonist in the first chapter. This women seems ...

All right. TOday I will not be playing the part of Grammar Nazi, porcupinestrongwill has that covered. Listen to her advice, most of it is good. Today I can actually ...

Your poem says that people don't care about your feelings. Okay. Simple enough, care to go a little further? Care to describe why people don't care about other peoples feelings. ...

You only discuss the downfalls of religion. You should devote an entire verse to all aspects of society, government, social/racial/gender ideologies, family life etc. You're being way to metaphysical

Your writing voice is great but you really should work on your use of tense and unnecessary descriptions. YOu also should just come out and name the characters then describe ...

All right. Today I will be taking the role of the inconsiderate critic, and i will be teaching you some very simple rules to writing that will improve this story ...

A good story idea. Just a few things you should work out though. And I'm not just talking about spelling errors. 1)"When they left they always left behind patches of ...