BaronFlame

Subtle. I had to read it a few times over. It seems to be a work of someone that has been on a psychedelic trip and and glanced at what ...

Nicely done. On of the reasons I love poetry that it can be and probably is very objective, in most cases that is. You can spin such an intricate web ...

Could be better. First things first, re-structure. Make sure that the bar length is more or less the same for consistent flow. I am not asking you to count every ...

Interesting. Not something that might interest me, subject wise that is, but it never the less intrigued me. You do present a very vivid image. The girl at her window, ...

Interesting, Very interesting. One of the few subjects I avoid simply because I've got a lot to express and this is too deep a topic for my words to do ...

Very nostalgic and brilliantly written. One of the most difficult things to do is to recall one's childhood. No matter how good our memory is as we grow older, childhood ...

I love it. While it is true that such short a poem can't possibly begin to address such colossal a topic but you have managed to capture it's essence in ...

Simple and elegant. I love the way the poem progresses and the fact that it stays on course. It's very easy to stray on a subject such as this one ...

A wonderful read. You expressed yourself perfectly and I could feel that sense of longing as well. It's very moving to be really honest because everyone of us or most ...

Brilliant. It's simple, neat and doesn't complicate things. Most writers would needlessly go into details which needn't be there, which in turn makes it look like a couple of words ...

It is by all means an interesting poem. You successfully conjured up a very vivid picture for the readers. Using the lyrics from a rap was a bold and risky ...

Interesting. Though I have one or two things to point out To describe it any other way would be as vain and Easy as pinning words to clouds. The " ...

Interesting, very interesting indeed. I had to go over it multiple times to grasp all that was going on there but I still wasn't able to understand all. A few ...

Nice! Brilliantly written. The narration was particularly good. The whole slightly informal "I-do-not-belong-here" perspective you took with the narration really did a lot for it. But some similar nam

" I feel like I am painting With these two hands, I am staining The canvas with different colors Of my emotions now raging " Brilliant starting. It's a fascinating ...