Bard

Hello, this is only a quick reply and since i dont have too much time right now because i should be sleeping but ur script caught my eye im going ...

Two things. First: Blocking and direction. Hard to understand with the **** things around them italicized is you best bet, also tooooooo muuuuuch. Let the dialog speak for its self ...

BOY: Well, [shrugs] I thought maybe things have been a little hard. This is one of many examples in the piece where, as a writer, you should let the actor ...

Very good job!, Nice character developement, imagery, plot devices etc, etc. This is my favorite piece of yours I have read, very nicely done! But, even though the story was ...

Very nice! Overall I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. Its rythm and simplicity are what, in my opinion, make it such a nice poem. Your word choice is very good too. ...

A very good beginning, full of good imagery and realistic dialogue, however quite a few errors too. Needs a bit of work in the editing stage; here are a few ...

A very interesting idea. I liked it a lot, though I would hve to agree with "Jiggity" some of it was a little cliched, though still thought provoking. My suggestion ...

Can you hear the whisper of the night upon the trees? Can you hear the longing stirring in the breeze? Can you see the stars –the tiny pricks of light? ...

I thoroughly enjoyed your poem. Your use of imagery gave it a firm abstract feeling. Good Job. 8) Now, however, i would like to point out a few things that ...

Very good, and very depressing--A good mix. :wink: i only found one error, but i think it might be a typo. Anyways, here it is... At sometimes my opinions were ...

Its quite well done, and I enjoyed it thoroughly. However I would like to offer a few suggestions: "Empires are falling from the skies!" I think in this you have ...

I thoroughly enjoyed what you wrote, and I thought your descriptions felt true to your story. I especially liked a few of your word choices; this one in particular I ...