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I thought it got better as it went along. I loved the description of her hair feeling like hay, and the sister's hair that smelled like bubble-gum shampoo. I really ...

Wow, this is fantastic. I loved the surreal quality of the beginning, and the description of the scene at the end was great. I really like how you don't come ...

This had a very complete feel to it. I liked the details, the specific examples at the beginning. Very nicely done. Part of me felt the ending was a little ...

The first stanza was good, but after that it completely deteriorated thanks to the rhyming. Don't give up on rhyming poems (though it's fine to experiment with non-lyric freeverse, and ...

Yes, I agree, rhythm would be a nice addition to this poem. And take out the rhyme in the second and third lines - it's out of place. This seems ...

I agree with cadmium. I would love to see your writing talents applied to better subject matter. Try something small, simple, easy, and tangible - a sneaker, for instance, or ...

I agree with Hunter. This needs a thorough edit, not only for apostrophes but also for those places where you've mixed up periods and commas, not finished a sentence, made ...

Very nice. I loved the last verse, especially: Paper-thin is the threshold Between these two Worlds And when again the reality of Sensation Meets the Hope of Imagination, I hope ...

A little too blatantly religious for me, but then again I'm an aetheist, so what do I know. Still, religious poems have a tendency to say the same thing - ...

Ok... it's not a new topic, but obviously an important one to adress... but I would like to see some new imagery here, some more personal feelings, maybe even a ...

Oh, I love snakes. And I like this poem, particularly this bit: his neck stiffening, and he stared me straight in the eye. He struck then, his gummy nubs for ...

Though Roman is even more of a romance language...anyway, getting distracted. I get the whole sexual reference thing, and it does sort of radiate that subtley... like the tempo of ...

I like it. I particularly like the traditional rhyme scheme (everyone always wants to be "different", but it's not like there's not a infinite amount of poems left to be ...

Ooooh, I love that last stanza, especially the last line. Totally know how you feel. I thought the first two stanzas were less interesting, not so captivating. I didn't really ...

This was very real, but it didn't have too much detail, which was good. I liked the simplicity and honesty about it. One thing that surprised me: in the second ...