Azila

This is really sweet and sad. It's not quite long enough to give a full critique, but that's okay--it's better than too long! I think that the way you started ...

This is pretty good! My only big comment would be that the characters are a bit shallow. With just a tad more character development I think you should enter this ...

Looks pretty good so far! I'm not 100% sure, but because it's set in the future I think you might want to post this in Science Fiction? I think it's ...

Yes, the descriptions are very nice. And yes again, it is a little confusing in the end--who's talking and who's listening? Which one is the babysitter? I thought that it ...

Mmm... I'm not sure what to say. I guess it's good--no, probably great--for what it is, but what it is just... isn't my cup of tea. Did that make any ...

Very nice Camille! Because it is so short, my only major comment is that you break up the huge paragraph... it wasn't very bad, but should be fixed anyway. I ...

Man, Camille! I'm so proud to have inspired this! The flow is beautiful... for any other piece I might have said you should make it a bit smoother, but I ...

I definitely agree with Heather; the sudden change isn't bad, but all I know about her before she changed is that she had mosquito bites! Play with it. With your ...

Firstly, I'm anything BUT an expert when it comes to poetry, so please feel free to ignore my entire review if you so chose. Now, onto the review: I like ...

This was a really touching, refreshing little piece of writing, I do declare! I love the way the story is told merely from the point of view of different characters ...

Hi! Sorry I haven't reviewed this sooner. Well, I really liked this chapter... your story is getting really interesting! I might be stupid, but this seemed wrong... “No der. Specifically?” ...

This is pretty good! I hope the contest is fine with flash fiction, though, because it's really short --too short for me to write a proper review. But I will ...

This was pretty good. I kind of think it would have been better if you'd introduced the bird theme earlier because the first two stanzas seem completely unconnected with the ...

This is really good! I'm not an expert when it comes to poetry, so please excuse me if I tell you something that would ruin your whole poem... Okay. This ...

Wow, this is really cool! The idea is a little unsettling, but very neat in deed. And the whole thing you did with switching the narration is done very well ...