Azila

Hi, Camille! I'm here as per request... though I was going to come anyway. ^_^ I started this when you didn't have any reviews yet, so if I repeat stuff ...

Hey, Kitty! (I hope you don't mind being called that--I like it as a name, and since your name is kitty15... well, anyway, let's get on to the critique. ^_^) ...

Hey there, Pickle! Nitpicks first... The man is rough, strong, his fingernails filthy, his eyes like stone, or iron. This is a little awkward... I suggest you put in an ...

Hello! I'm really glad to see another story about this character, and I think that this prompt or competition (or whatever it is) about writing 100 stories about one character ...

Hello, I see you're new to YWS! Welcome. I suggest you never use the "pre" thing, because it makes the text be a weird font that's hard on the eyes. ...

Hi Saint! This piece is really solid, and smooth, so my nit-picks will probably be pretty--well--nitpicky... ^_^ Jaden’s heart beat a wild tempo, each beat so loud that he heard ...

Hi Pawprint! So you CAN come on! I thought you told me you weren't allowed? Oh well. Why weren't you at class today? Anyway... I lifted my leg up into ...

Hello! Nitpicks first... She would read Matty bedtime stories before he went to fell asleep, and would place a blanket over me when I fell asleep studying late at night. ...

:oops:I thought I already reviewed this! Ah well, I read it, then had to leave the house, I think. I will definitely review it when you post it again! Sorry. ...

Hi there, Lupe! Nitpicks first... From my perch on the dock, my eyes explore the dark emerald green water. I think "emerald green" should be hyphenated. My gaze travels down ...

OOPS! I thought I already critiqued this! I guess I forgot... Okay, because there aren't many grammatical issues (and the few ones that there are have already been pointed out), ...

I've come to deliver a review, as per request! *bows* Just keep in mind that I don't know all that much about poetry. :roll: Firstly, is the first line ("True ...

Hi Cat! I'm sooooooo sorry I couldn't do this as soon as I promised--my rabbit just had surgery, and we've been force-feeding her all day. :( Anyway... Insistent wind snaked ...

Hi Stars! I count sheep. All day, all night. I count them because I can't sleep. The rhyme here kind of bothered me. :? Also, where do the sheep come ...

Hi there, Shadow Thief! Thundered the raving mad Zeus, standing tall in his white toga. I might be wrong, but I think "raving mad" should be hyphenated, thus: "raving-mad." “I’ll ...