AyumiGosu17

Wow. This is a little ironic... I just posted a poem my beloved wrote for me, because it meant that much to me, and then I read this... This is ...

Hello, my fellow love-struck peer! Your imagery and personification is superb. I simply love it. It's been a while since I've seen someone use this method, and most times it's ...

I didn't get past the first paragraph. It was too hard to read. You have so many mistakes - the beginnings of sentences - and even the pronoun "I"! - ...

Sounds pretty cool. I actually find it unique; it's not along the lines of the vast majority of the other posts on this forum - dragons, unicorns, fairies, and vampires. ...

That first night I met Jack, he was on the brightly coloured dance floor with his best friend: Luke as I entered with Lucy. The underlines aren't necessary, and the ...

Interesting. But a few problems: ...robbed of something precious ,his family, someone... ...[i]"I don't know why she even bothers to keep me here,she doesn't care what happens to me as ...

Are there really Ghosts ? Is there a paranormal life in this world? I've seen some signs of certain Paranormal things. I beleive in them. Just a note: put a ...

Very true. I want to applaud you on how well you differentiated between the different types of love and just plain lust. It is a very informative, well-supported essay, and ...

Hmm. Interesting. Now, I'm not much as Starwars fanatic, but this intrigues me, makes me itch for more. I like the descriptions and the suspense. It really snared my attention. ...

Hey, I finally finished reading. Yeah, weariness caught me halfway through last night... :lol: Anyway, now to critique! I do like your story's plot. It's a bit like Ghost Whisperer ...

Don't be disheartened! It's very good, despite your block. I like how you depict all the different characteristics of each decade. This is very fabulously written! I can't find much ...

I like this. A lot. It drew my attention, and held it. It left me on the edge of my seat, begging for more. And the ending leaves me curious. ...

Hmm. An interesting take on a Bible story. But it's controversial for me. I like your descriptive, narrative style. I could picture the entire scene as though I were standing ...

Hmm. Interesting. This isn't too bad a take on the 80s, but you could probably do a little more describing at the beginning. Tell us what the square looks like, ...

Okay. I like this, but there are a few things that are bothering me. The commas at the end of every line and the capitalization at every beginning: You don't ...