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Re: Water Changes Everything
Hey Autopilot! The title of this poem brought me running to it, I think it alone is beautiful and conveys something meaningful doesn't it? Water seems to me to be ...
Aug 9, 2016 -
Re: Collection of Poetry
Yungcamus, This is an interesting collection of poems, and I think that when you post them all together in a singular work there's a nod that there's a common thread ...
Jul 31, 2016 -
Re: Another Zombie Novel (not actual title) Prologue part 1
Hey Myjaspercat, I love that you are trying to approach the zombie genre in a new way, that is definitely commendable. With this first part, we definitely get the sense ...
Jul 31, 2016 -
Re: Translator
Vince, I really like the concept of this and the creation of bilingual works, I'd love to see more of these types of poems out there.
Jul 31, 2016 -
Re: He Kindly Stopped for Me
Morrigan! So this is all just gonna be unfiltered thought commentary that contradicts itself half-way through rather than a review. I hope it helps in someway? Here goes! I found ...
Jul 28, 2016 -
Re: Beating hearts like ours (The Chauffeur)
Carolina, There's a solid beat and rhyme scheme in this piece that engages the reader throughout the poem. I especially enjoyed your opener with the Her / Chauffeur lines. I ...
Jul 3, 2016 -
Re: inside the whale
It looks like the poem IS A WHAAAAAALE! Way to start NaPo early! That is gorgeous. It even looks like it's got little fishies inside! :3 I also love your ...
Mar 30, 2016 -
Re: The August Province - 1.2
Sagitta! So, Jorah is quite snarky, eh? x) I appreciate that. I appreciate her thoughts in the beginning and feelings of regret, or feelings like she'd be left for dead: ...
Mar 26, 2016 -
Re: The August Province - 1.1
Sagitta, I think we open this chapter with thumping of hearts and beating of rain and beating of horse hooves. It's such a weird description to use beating for horse ...
Mar 26, 2016 -
Re: Colliding Lives
Noelle! So this piece was sad :c I kind of wish there was more, actual dialogue, actual descriptions of the guy other than tall/handsome, it wasn't until the end that ...
Mar 26, 2016 -
Re: Star Shade, Chapter 3: Escape
Pernicus! This chapter is straight forward enough! We learn the names and jobs of the squad mates, and of course, Dunham is great. I would have liked to see a ...
Mar 26, 2016 -
Re: Star Shade, Chapter 2: Death on the High
Pernicus! So, the pause Garett feels as he looks back at the old lady, you fooled me for a second because I'm thinking for sure he's going to go back ...
Mar 26, 2016 -
Re: Beyond -- Prologue
Hey Semper, So, the beginning of this hide and chase scene I was a bit confused. Due to the prologue and the bolded bit as I'm reading, I'm framed already ...
Mar 26, 2016 -
Re: it's kind of funny, really
Skins! How goes the dive? Based on this piece alone, I see you've landed gracefully. Actually, you should write more poetry and/or share more of whatever other poems you have ...
Mar 18, 2016 -
Re: Dirigibles
Gema, I actually kind of fell into this piece, I like it in all its brevity. I love the image this creates and the style of it kind of reminds ...
Mar 16, 2016
