Audy

Hm, I kinda like this. I like the voice and the tone that is evident throughout the piece. It definitely goes well with the message you are trying to convey-- ...

Bravo! I really liked this, especially the first and last stanza. The subtlety in the beginning with the single-word 'Vanished.' really emphasized the horrific screams in the next line. The ...

Alright so I apologize beforehand if I sound harsh or anything, I have your best intentions at heart :) I was in my bed. Not quite asleep anymore, but I ...

Wow. The ending was real powerful, it left shivers going down my spine. That was simply, wow! It evoked so much emotion, I could feel the heartbreak and the longing, ...

This is a very powerful image, I loved how you described it using the shadows and the smokes :D You are very talented! The other, broad shouldered, steps forward and ...

I agree with what was said above. The repetition was good but it was just too long, maybe it was just the double-spaces, but I was just scrolling down thinking ...

I agreed with everything above, but to add my two cents: The poem seemed drawn out to me. There were a lot of places where the same ideas were repeated, ...

It sounds like a good and interesting start to a story, are you going to go on with it? :) I like the dialogue. It's quick and not bogged down ...

Hey Eliza! I'm going to be doing a line by line critique. I apologize beforehand if I sound rude, please don't take it personally. I tend to do that, but ...

This flows so beautifully! A truly wonderful work of art--how you have the musician and the dancer. Muaha, you're a clarinet player, aren't you Snoink? :wink: I got a nice ...

Well I for one liked the repetition. This poem meant a good deal to me, because knowing someone who has been in depression kinda put me in a state of ...

The theme was really cute, and you do a good job at evoking emotion in this. You should be proud, this poem has got a lot of feeling in it, ...

Ride along little bobbin , don't even look up from your game. Don't you realize what you're missing? Don't you see the wonders outside your window? Bobbin is spelled with ...

Oi, this is terrifying! Sent shivers down my spine there at the end, but I love it :D I agree with most of the stuff that was said above. In ...

I really like the theme in this =D And the poem is so simple, simple rhymes, short, sweet, I like it though, because it kinda goes along with the whole ...