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Tgirly, I have to say that I love this poem - not so much the title. I do like the sentiments expressed here though, I like how you incorporated some ...

Spark, I actually remember reading the snippet for this when we were doing workshop ;) So I feel priveleged to see the next development. I understand that this a draft, ...

Persy, That feeling when you know you have a good novel in your hands, and you sit back and read and enjoy, feet propped up on the coffee table? That ...

wewinwelose, I have some simple questions, but they only apply if you are planning to further improve this piece. What is poetry to you? And what is your intent with ...

Emmzziee, To go along with what ghostie mentioned, yes the rhythm and flow of the poem is off, mostly the issue here has to do with punctuation errors. Forget this ...

Anna, I love your concepts and ideas. The rhyming was nice to hear, there were a few places that it seemed somewhat forced ^_^; also be sure to keep a ...

Samii, I like the poem and I like the intentions, there is definitely a lyrical quality to this, love the shedding velvet line. I do like the images here, the ...

Michaeld, Err. This is a most difficult review for me. I'm all for defying conventions in genre, yet my honest opinion tells me this certainly read more like prose. I ...

Horizon, I'm proud to say that your experiment is a success. In the sense that this is indeed a pretty good poem (I liked it, anyway), and it does indeed ...

Hamingway, You know, I like this as a starting point. Like a springboard. Now you just have to make us care. What I'm getting at the moment is the speaker's ...

Hello Amberla, I actually quite like the poem. The message was real clear and I liked the direction it went :) I thought it was cute there in the beginning, ...

Justagirl, I know you needed this by Tuesday, so I had to get this done ASAP xD Sorry if it's sloppily written. I think I've already mentioned in the PM ...

Twit, Heh. Overall I love the voice in this and the strange structures of your sentences, use of 'shilly-shally' etc. it helps with that oldish tone of voice, and the ...

JamieP, Here to return the favor. I like this piece a lot! By all means, don't be nervous of posting! I think there's a very nice flow in this, and ...

Jas, This is a lovely poem for an experimental piece, certainly, the double-poem did it's job and I'll tell you what I thought about it in a second. First, I ...