Audy

Marm! Repetition called me to tell me it is enjoying this poem

Hey Kazeybear, I've read a few of your works and one thing that I find that connects all of them is that 1.) You have an excellent handle with flow, ...

Lums, I want to get the technical out of the way: First, "knockout punch" seems so odd here, HOWEVER it could be because I am clueless when it comes to ...

Hey Amelie I appreciate the ambiguity of the "it" that bothers and plagues at the narrator's mind, as I am reading "it" to be the narrator's own emotions and feelings, ...

Autumns, The tone of this poem has a lot of care and love despite the subject matter which gets us through swimmingly, there are some formatting/flow issues in the beginning ...

Holy crap Marm. That is powerful. That actually took me by complete surprise and I RARELY feel the rug swept underneath me in a poem (usually I can see it ...

Hey Amelie, Watch the tenses in stanza one. The verb "cut" is in present tense, so based on that I would edit "exited" to "exit" and keep it present tense. ...

Light! Oi, that present perfect continuous tense is a real booger xD The choice of tense is fine as it implies a continuation of the sun's wamrth, but that jarring ...

Maybe in place of 'perfectly curled' allude to the sound of the leaves to make the meaning more clear? I also was caught up in the imagery of leaf-symmetry and ...

Kaos, I see your poems growing in scope and material and it is such a pleasure to see, it is a pleasure to see also the deep, richness in its ...

Is it that the model is a ghost in actuality but alive in the artist's mind brought to life by the act of painting her? The end being that break ...

I am back! So, I loved the elegant way of stepping into these thoughts and these imageries, an afterthought and a contemplation and a zeal for trying to find the ...

Ahhh

Lums, I love the twinge and vulnerability presented in the voice, especially that final stanza, where the effect is so small and poignant. The italics were stylistically such an excellent ...

Lightsong, YWS is not very kind to this poem on mobile. By chance I turned my phone portrait and enjoyed it loads more. An aside for the cellphone users among ...