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STORY OF MY LIFE...except...replace Max with Cody...kinda....I guess.... This poem is slightly emo though. Dear Max, Do you remember? I looked up, and awkwardly caught you looking at me and ...

This will mostly be a play by play of stuff I loved rather than a critique. 1. Throes of passion threw me not, A sin I did not suit. For ...

Only two little grievances You lost your rhyme scheme here: Spring has come and all animals stir From the mouse in the corner To the horse in the barn and ...

thoughts clouded my mind like paint from a brush diffusing in clear water clouding it tarnishing it. my veins pulsed my blood rushed I shook, silently but violently like an ...

I'm not going to lie, I expected this to suck because you misspelled heart, but I found this simply amazing. However I keep it here for safe keeping (this seems ...

The Other Side by Patrick Mulvihill Let me tell you a story of a soul Lost, alone, with no control He walked alone (I feel like you dropped your rhyme ...

He sits on the street, owns none I feel like none should be nothing but a guitar, Other than that this was a really good poem and I really liked ...

Alright what do you mean this is bad? It's amazing! Alright, a bit awkward, but I love the subject. Him Who is the one they call Him? This doesn't seem ...

I really like the imagery in here. You used some verbs and descriptions that I wouldn't have thought about. Like Clawing at my hem. I really wouldn't think about something ...

I suck so i was wondering if i could get some pointers? Right, so you better not use first person, contractions, or slang. It makes you sound unintelligent in essay ...

Wrote this in like, three minutes. I edited it a little, but not much... What do you thing??? Think. Sorry, that annoyed me ------- The pain has lessened, but it ...

When your world is crashing around u YOU Someone u You think may never accept u You Gives u you the hope u you have been longing for For when ...

Woah, I really like this. I really like what you're trying to say. However, [quote="DisturbedDisorder"] Listen to them fight over What they’re trying to sell. that bit sounds slightly awkward. ...

Vice. One a day became three, she was upset at me, You should have had them on second lines, it just sounds better she hated me. But all of us ...

I like how this is about a horse. I think every word you said could be true (I've never had a horse, so I wouldn't know.), but I don't doubt ...