Published December 7, 2010
When your world is crashing around you
Someone You think may never accept you
Gives you the hope you have been longing for
For when you think of the person you think in longing
Every day I cry tears fall from my cheeks
My brown eyes are never far from tears
Its it's sad but true never have these eyes ever been so wet
He lays there waiting every second of every day
Waiting for us ,his family, he won’t let go not now
It kills us to see him like this, it rips us open
There’s a chair by his bed side
Everyday it's filled when one gets up, another sits down
I curl in on myself , I don’t know what to do
When I talk with him, it can never be about food
And now he barely eats, it's just a bite here and there
He sleeps most of the time, so you sit and watch TV
Pictures and art that surrounded me my whole life through
Is on the wall in front of me turning my stomach
He say my name I smile not sure what to say or do
We talk about everything , from my mess ups, last year, to my class
To the people I don’t like in my classes, to the guys I like
This strong old man kept me going all these years through
But now I have to do it by myself…
I don’t know how and I'm scared
I don’t show this side, who is there for me to fall back on now
The answer is myself , I don’t know how
I don’t when but one I'll look back and thank him because ..
He made me strong but I carried on without him
And I see him again I want to hear I’m so proud of you Desiree
I want to be the one he looks down on and smiles
Cause I’ll smile now cause as the tears subside
I'll show me to the world no longer hiding in my shell
No longer hiding behind who I was and where I come from
When it comes time to say goodbye I’ll smile
And tell him … I love u Nonnon and I'll be strong and carry
Till I see u again and tell Nonny I love her too but I think see knows
Goodbye Nonnon, I'll love u forever
Desiree Hohman
Rest in peace Nonnon!!!
I’ll love you forever
September 29, 2010 3
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When your world is crashing around u Someone u think may never accept u Gives u the hope u have been longing for For when u think of the person u think in longingEvery day I cry tears fall from my cheeks My brown eyes are never far from tears Its sad but true never have these eyes ever been so wetHe lays there waiting every second of everydayWaiting for us his family, he wont let go not now It kills us to see him like this, it rips us openThere’s a chair by his bed side Everyday it filled when one gets up another sits downI curl in on my self , I don’t know what to do When I talk with him, it can never be about food And now he barely eats, its like a bite here and thereHe sleeps most of the time, so u sit and watch t.vPictures and art that surrounded me my whole life through Is on the wall in front of me turning my stomach He say my name I smile not sure what to say or do We talk about everything , from my mess ups last year to my classTo the people I don’t like in my classes to the guys I like This strong old man kept me going all these years throughBut now I have to do it by myself…I don’t know how and im scared I don’t show this side, who is there for me to fall back on nowThe answer is my self , I don’t know how I don’t when but one ill look back and thank him cause ..He made me strong but I carried on with out him And I see him again I want to hear im so proud of u desireeI want to be the one he looks down on and smilesCause ill smile now cause as the tears subside Ill show me to the world no longer hiding in my shellNo longer hiding behind who I was and where I come from When it come time to say goodbye ill smile And tell him … I love u nonnon and ill be strong and carry Till I see u again and tell nonny I love her too but I think see knowsGoodbye nonnon, ill love u forever Desiree hohmanRest in peace nonnon!!! Ill love you foreverSeptember 29, 2010 </3
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Ok, you had GREAT emotion and it was a very sad poem, but your grammar was horrible. I'm sorry to saw, but it was. U is supposed to be you and Ill is supposed to be I'll. There were a lot of other things as well.
Nice poem, it's sad and I don't really get it because it seems like nonnon is alive then he's dead so...
Keep writing,
Alzora