Published December 14, 2010
I suck so i was wondering if i could get some pointers?
Essay
The significance of this quote“Pride is a wonderful thing, a seed that bears two vines, life and death” is basically saying that being prideful can cause death, just like it did in “The Scarlet Ibis”. The brother wasn’t going to let his brother’s disabilities to interfere with him having a normal life and by doing so he was the reason he died. “I thought myself pretty smart at many things, like holding my breath, running, jumping, or climbing the vines in Old Woman Swamp, and I wanted more than anything else someone to race to Horsehead Landing, someone to box with, and someone to perch with in the top fork of the great pine behind the barn, where across the fields and swamps you could see the sea.” That right there is an example from the story telling that he wanted a brother to do all those things with and he didn’t care if he was going to have to teach him extra hard to get it since he was being greedy. Being prideful doesn’t cause just death; he still could’ve been prideful but not push his brother as hard and he probably would’ve lived.” When he was two, if you laid him on his stomach, he began to try to move himself, straining terribly. The doctor said that with his weak heart this strain would probably kill him, but it didn’t. “I wanted to add this quote in here since it proves that it wasn’t just the brother that wanted him to be able to do all that stuff but the brother himself wanted to push himself also so he could try to live like a normal boy.
Outline
I. The narrator of “The Scarlet Ibis” by James Hurst makes the story more realistic because it like sucks you into it and you part of the story. It is nearly impossible not to cry at the end because you feel like he is your own brother. It is written in a first person view.
II. I thought myself pretty smart at many things, like holding my breath, running, jumping, or climbing the vines in Old Woman Swamp.
III. I wanted more than anything else someone to race to Horsehead Landing, someone to box with, and someone to perch with in the top fork of the great pine behind the barn.
IV. James Hurst knows that by using a first person point of view that he is making you part of the family so that you don’t want to stop reading.
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It fine if you come of as a total bitch it doesnt bother me. Sorry im not as good at english as you are but im only in freshman english in high school and not that it matters but i a got a 96 on it thank you! thank you for you comments
there all appreciated!
Hi Mauer!


It looks like you're struggling with writing a literary essay! It's very hard, isn't it? Plus, a lot of English teachers aren't very good at explaining what you need to do.
What I'm going to do to help you is to lead you through a literary essay that I had to write. That way, you'll (hopefully!) get a better idea of what your teacher wants and expects from you and you'll get A+'s all the time. If you have any questions, feel free to ask.
I was looking over your essay... anyway! Outlines are really good things to have, but instead of having quotes, you might have what you want to discuss about the quote! A topic sentence of sorts.
For example! I had to write a literary essay for Fahrenheit 451, which is an EXCELLENT book and I thoroughly recommend it! You'll love it.
Anyway... this is what my outline looked like:
So, what is this? This my basic outline. Each point had at least a paragraph dedicated to it. The thesis is where you talk about what your essay is going to be about. Mine was about the symbolism of fire and water in Fahrenheit 451. Then, in the conclusion, you have to tie this story in real life.
...sound a bit complicated?
Anyway! Your first paragraph should basically be describing the book and then introducing your thesis, or what you want to dedicate your essay about. Not only that, but your thesis should be something you can prove. For instance, in your essay, you tried to prove that pride is a seed that bears two vines, life and death.
Your thesis kind of looks like this:
The significance of this quote“Pride is a wonderful thing, a seed that bears two vines, life and death” is basically saying that being prideful can cause death, just like it did in “The Scarlet Ibis”.
Yep! So in this case, you were supposed to prove that pride was a seed that bears two vines. Which is an interesting idea!
Anyway, this is what my first paragraph looked like:
So! First step of writing an essay? Introduce it in a meaningful to your reader which propels him onwards!
Now, remember how the thesis generally something that you need to prove? Well, you need to prove it with quotes, and the more quotes, the better. However, you also need to analyze the quotes. You can't just spit them out and assume that your reader is going to understand you. You have to drill it in their heads what is important.
This is what I did with the first point, which was "Fire is used to mirror the society’s needless consumption and constant desire of change" :
The numbers, by the way, are my citations. ^^
Basically, what I did here was I continued pushing the envelope here. I would introduce a quote, explain how it related to my topic, explain how it was relevant to my thesis (which was what I wanted to prove) and continued doing this with a variety of quotes. So, by the end of this point, you should feel like I've been very thorough in introducing this little point! You should also feel that I accurately portrayed the book and such.
I did this with every point, but I won't bug you with that! This one is quite enough for demonstration purposes, lol.
The last part, the conclusion, is where you wrap everything up and you are allowed to make some sort of commentary on the book. But, what the teacher generally wants is for you to make it a sweeping statement which can be used in your real life. They like to see when books are relevant to your life! Mine was this:
Cheesy? Yeah. But she loved it and I got an A+ for this paper.
Anyway! This was a college literary paper, so if you're looking at my paper, thinking, "OMG, I CAN'T DO THAT," then don't worry! That's okay. You're not in college yet... this is just preparation for what is to come! By the time you get to this level, you'll be fine.
So! A recap!
Good luck!