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Re: The Last Storm (2)
Classy, once again you leave me with an unedited story. I didn't read any of the other reviews because I was too lazy too, so I hope I'm not repeating ...
Apr 10, 2010 -
Re: The Last Storm (1)
“So, you know what we are here for then?” Asks the other man with the dark skin, deep black hair and cold eyes. A wide smile spreads across his face, ...
Apr 9, 2010 -
Re: Wolf Wars
Hello my evil half. Err... equal half. But about twenty stood tall. They weren’t going to let the enemy bring them down. They might have lost everything they had, and ...
Apr 7, 2010 -
Re: Goosebumps fan-fiction: Night at Murder Mansion, part 1
“Uh…well, no , Max,” She said, taken aback, “ A nother five minutes, I think, according to my map here.” “Cool,” was my answer, and I pulled out my music ...
Mar 31, 2010 -
Re: The Girl in the Cathedral
Howler, that was an incredible story. Everything about it was enjoyable. The sentence structure made it read smoothly. I don't think I've ever found a story on here as easy ...
Mar 28, 2010 -
Re: A Criminal's Heart - Ch-1(Olivia)
Hello there. I must warn you, I am still very much under the torture of a virus taking over my body. So not even I know how my comments on ...
Mar 23, 2010 -
Re: deleted
A heap of broken bones lay there The caved in skulls, the marrows of the ribs split open The lair of unwholesome beasts unveiled As did my knuckles whiten on ...
Mar 18, 2010 -
Re: One -- The Juggler (2nd draft)
Hello there, I shall be your reviewer today. Be prepared for a long and grueling set of controversies. No, I am totally kidding. I'm always a nice reviewer. :smt036 The ...
Mar 18, 2010 -
Re: The Haunting, Prolouge
Hello, I'll be your reviewer today before somebody comes along and gives you any brutal criticism. :P I ran out onto the street, my head swimming. Adding an "out" makes ...
Mar 17, 2010 -
Re: Mirror
Delilah Shayne finished her make up solemnly, and looked at her refection in her the vanity mirror, and sighed. Her ash-blonde hair was in perfect place, softly falling on her ...
Mar 17, 2010 -
Re: Rohan - Prologue: War and Tragedy
Hello, Ahmed. I said I would check out your prologue and I have. :) Note: I will use smilies a lot, in hopes that they may make some harsh words ...
Mar 16, 2010 -
Re: lit analysis 'how to read like a professor', not recommended
But you are good at describing things. Believe it or not, a lot of writers struggle to describe scenery and create mood. The thing is, that is the difference between ...
Mar 15, 2010 -
Re: I Would Endure
You haven't even received a review. :( *Will review at some point later today* :wink:
Mar 14, 2010 -
Re: Greensleeves
Hello irsihfire. :smt039 I will put my comments and suggestions in bold font. I will put words and phrases/sentences that confuse me, or are obvious mistakes in blue. I shall ...
Mar 13, 2010 -
Re: The Assassin's Redemption- Redrafted
Hello there, here as requested a while ago. :D I was having trouble finding the message you sent me to review your work. I was like who was that guy ...
Mar 12, 2010
