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The man dressed in black followed orders from his general, and struck the president across the face with the butt of his gun, the president grunted in pain, more blood ...

“Stop it, Gary. I didn’t do it to be vicious. I loved her, too. I had no idea she heard me, or I would have waited. I didn’t mean to ...

Please forgive me if I sound harsh in this review. I am not feeling too well at the moment for various reasons. Lack of sleep is not one of them, ...

Darn, I really had trouble looking for mistakes in this. Not sure if I can say that it's making a review easy. :? Well, I think I'll skip the lengthy ...

Key to review: Blue: Things of interest, that need to be looked at or omitted. Of course the decision is up to you. Red: Means I moved it around, or ...

The anger floods into me Filling me up, over flowing Until the hot, sticky tears brim my eyes I usually see that word spelled as overflowing. :? And I believe ...

I found nothing particularly wrong with the first part. :D But as for your extremely long second paragraph I found several issues. You forgot to capitalize the first letter in ...

“Reasonably bright, but can't be bothered to put the effort in.” t hey used to say. Now it was “Bad work. Bad influence on the school.” . Why, once , ...

Now, while Bane was dawdling his time away in space, Grievous had already made his way to an outskirt beyond a small town that you readers would know of as ...

He looked around the white room splattered with scarlet red, his eyes resting on the table where the dripping knife sat. The knife was not the only tool of torture ...

You are a genius. From the beginning with the J.K. Rowling and Michael Myer thing. Or was her name Stephanie Myer? Oh well, what's the difference? They're both horror movie ...

Writing about twins in this manner can be tricky. Since as you say they are identical, how is one judged as more attractive than the other? Of course since we're ...

I'm not sure which side I would take. Though I do think you make a great point by saying that an individual in power may abuse his authority to control ...

As usual a lot of people beat me to the chase of pointing out a lot of the grammar and what not mistakes. So I think I'll just comment. Great ...

The people before me beat me to the chase on a couple of things but... I have no time to lose. My strength is leaving me. I lunge. The wolf ...