Armadian

Excelent Matt! I enjoyed the prologue and the chapter. :D Really all I had problems with was: We moved far away to help deal with the pain of not being ...

This poem seems mixed up and not very organized. I can't really get a rhythm to this so its kinda hard to read. I consider organizing your lines into more ...

I love this poem. It means so much and in so little words. It has a "deep" feeling to it, as I already told you. I also love your word ...

Hey Janelle! Wonderfully written, just found some capitalization problems. I'll change the color to red if I find it shouldnt be capitalized and I will change the color to blue ...

Thanks... I didn't want to give it any organization, that's how the words came out of my head (after watching over 75% of my friends perform in the last three ...

The discomfited fidgeting in my hand, the twitch as my fingers rub the door frame, five times too many, five times too many, five times too many. and again. While ...

Crazy Me This is my crazy song. My faith. My redemption. My hopes. The turning of a new leaf. This is me. Unveiled. Untold. Unfinished. The birth of a legend. ...

I get the idea that your trying to make the reader get, but you should probably consider fixing your grammar and spelling, and then organizing your work into stanza's. That ...

I liked your poem. Especially with your words. You left a certain impulse after it. It made me feel your emotion. Embers Flicker. Alluring, ethereal glow. Illuminating, enticing. Affixing everything ...

I enjoyed reading your poem, except all the stanza made it lose some of its rhythm for me. Maybe consider putting it into 2 big stanza's like this. You were ...

First off, this poem was very good but the only thing I had a problem with was: The earth is no longer fruitful, Its once great cities lay still as ...

I liked your poem very, very much. But the one issue I had was that you rhymed 'you' and 'you' in the first stanza. Other than that it was perfectly ...

Yeah some one really did die. My friend Hannah. September 2nd. I liked this... I liked the first two lines but then after that things sort of got ... wordy, ...

Short and sweet, Pheonixfire. Very nively done, but perhaps one thing to look at... Breathing out And breathing in The world is ever, Ever turning On this water-world we spin ...

"LIES" ‘Well I love you.’ What a waste. ‘I love you and good-bye.’ How do those two things escape your mouth in one sentence? Do they even coincide? I don’t ...