Areida

I definitely LOL'ed on the second section. Oh, Luke, whatever are we going to do with you, poor soul? More favorites: LENA (to Sunshine) Aww, boys are so cute when ...

Hello number four! Hehe, more fun times. I'm just going to pretend that James is coming back. We cannot loooooose him! Favorite-ness: LENA What the hell are you wearing, Sunshine? ...

I really enjoyed the Luke/James pre-bedtime interaction. It was incredibly awkward, but in a really fun way. Sometimes awkwardness just makes me feel awkward and I want to get away ...

Hi Alice! You requested this back in March, so my apologies for taking so long to get to it. It looks like you've already gotten lots of lovely feedback, and ...

Hey babyboymilky! It looks like you've already gotten some excellent feedback here, and I agree with most of it. Even as a non-poet (which, if you think about it, most ...

Hi 'Rina Pi! You bragged to me about your four comments the other night on AIM, so I figured I'd pop on over and be the fifth. :D I was ...

I guess this is dead so... This is spam, SIC. Please refrain from commenting on your own work unless you are responding to a critiquer or posting an update in ...

Hi Suz! I haven't read Party Killers , though it's definitely on my list. :) Regardless, this works as a snippet. I know there are a lot of people who ...

Usually when I'm reading and commenting on a piece on YWS, even if it's really really good, I always kind of half-wish that it were just a little shorter, because ...

Hey JFW! Thanks for leaving me the link. It's always nice to have some requests waiting around for me, whenever I actually get around to critiquing things. I was very ...

Hey, Smiley! I don't think I've seen you around before, and it looks like this is your first post, so welcome to YWS! I'm Areida, but you can call me ...

Hi Ginger! Not a bad piece you've got here, but not a particularly excellent one either. I didn't feel any kind of rhythm along the way, and some of your ...

Mm, baking soda for breakfast is my FAVE-UH-RIT. With gay bars on the side, please. SUNSHINE (nodding) I do, Lena--spiritual food. I noticed the other night that you were very ...

Yeah! We're angry, not retarded! And Lena's milkshakes totally brought all the boys to the kitchen. Hehehhee, I so want to see this acted out. I'm glad you're not asking ...

I'm not sure if you were going for gruesome, but if so, I think that was achieved. I wasn't particularly intrigued by this little snippet, and honestly had to force ...