Areida

I had to read it a few times to really feel the full impact of the words, because it moves rather quickly and I always read things too fast, but ...

similarly not wanted. What about unwanted instead of not wanted ? One was tall and dark, his black was wet with the rain previously in the evening Did you mean ...

I agree with Incan...make us feel the pain you feel..don't just tell us. I've recently begun reading lots of books on how to improve my writing, and the one big ...

Well, I used to have this thing where it wasn't poetry unless it rhymed, but now rhyming kind of bothers me. Also, your rhyming doesn't flow too goes way too ...

It's as mixed up as a dislexic trying to read, I'm pretty sure dyslexic is spelled with a 'y'. Okay, I am definitely not a poet, so the only suggestion ...

I try most despratly to scream But the cruel and heartless creatures, Have split my throat Blood splatters upon the ground And weakly i crawl away The sun will rise ...

silence creeping in wet feet on beige carpet holding hands and whispering I liked that part because I could actually feel my bare feet on the carpet...very cool. Not a ...

I loved it. All and all it was very powerful and had some great descriptions/metaphors. Loved the windshield/review mirror thing.....very original thought. May I steal it? *prepares to steal Dusky's ...

Well, I suppose I like it...sort of...a little.....heck, I dunno. It seems more like a song, but it's kind of (for lack of a better word) cliched. You played with ...

The breath of life love touches his parched lips What about: The breath of life Love touches his parched lips. Anyway, I'm no poet, so that was really the only ...

It doesn't make seems at some points like a parody (the pizzas' being tasteless), while at other places it's quite serious (drowning in dreams)- like you couldn't make up your ...

I read it in the fourth grade, so of course I didn't catch the fact that it was a political statement, not a story about a bunch of animals on ...

I chose no, but it has wonderful potential. See-people waiting in line at soup kitchens that have one of the most depressed looks on their faces.The clouds that hang in ...

It's (for lack of a better word) unsettling. But excellent. Very well-written and gripping. I found Angel's fear easy to feel and was actually afraid along with her- something that ...

WOW!! Okay, if you think you're not a poet, then you're insane because that was incredible. Unlike many of the poems I read, which are full of dark emotions and ...