Areida

I agree with Dusky. The narrator claims to be an individual but is really no different from a million other whiny teens who hate preppy people and their "fashionable clothes". ...

I really liked this, even though it seemed kind of dark... sad... not really sure how I feel about it exactly, but I do like it. I tried to breathe ...

The revised version is definitely better. I think the grandmother's thoughts/message to her granddaughter work much better when they're in italics and unspoken. I would change: When my tears fall ...

It's pretty cool. The only thing that really bugged me was the "dispair". It's actually "despair". Other than that, I liked the imagery of a tear carressing a person's cheek ...

A classic isn't necessarily defined by the number of years it's been around. There's no "set number" of years. Don't the Lord of the Rings count as classics oftentimes? Red ...

I agree about how in some parts the words just don't seem quite right, but I'm such an awful poet that I hardly ever bother. This is good, though. I ...

I have to agree; it was very well done. I think I only found one typo... “She woke up while you were in the shower. She needed changed.” I'm not ...

Wow... I really, really like this. It's kind of detached and somewhat vague, but the imagery is marvelous. I especially liked: "you sit on your beach, with your shades on ...

#30: Though nose-picking is strictly prohibited after dinner, it is a requirement before bedtime. #31: For the next eight minutes, all children born shall be named "Steve". #32: All cookies ...

Sureal!! Ahahahahaha.... I laughed so hard when I read that! That's flippin' awesome! Okay, picture this: Seventh grade, volleyball practice. We've broken up into groups of two and are switching ...

I'm not especially fond of it either. Right now it's really slow and pretty much nothing out of the ordinary. Also, I suggest a little work on your dialogue, because ...

Very dark, and sort Tim Burton-esque because of the dash of morbid humour. I liked your images (spiders, cheese, little kids); they were effective. The only thing I'd change would ...

Yeah, this was definitely one of your more confusing Hourglass stories. I think you need to add some more historical stuff or something, because it seems extremely contemporary. I didn't ...

That was awesome. I was really freaked out for a while there, because it just goes to show you what can happen. Very original though. Good to know you're not ...

I was in the sixth grade, and was still going to school in a town about half and hour away from my hometown. We were on the way to school ...