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Oooh... I like it. The heart idea is a nice effect so it bites that didnt' work. Once you mentioned it, though, I can see how that would have worked. ...

I like it. Nobody in my family really gets into writing like I do, so it's nice to see people that make it a family affair. Besides that, I know ...

Ooooh... very nice work. I didn't notice any plot holes or any problems like that, but mainly typos-- little things easily repaired. I really want to critique it now, but ...

Oooh... The end showed more of your point than the beginning, but it was all good. I like how you made sure that nothing related too directly with the abuse, ...

I wouldn't say it had an earth-shattering effect on me, but I did thoroughly enjoy it. I actually have another idea for a novel dancing around in my head because ...

Wow... definitely my favourite poem of yours since you know i'd sing for you . By the way, we quote that at school and spoof it all the time now ...

Hey, CL! I'm glad you reposted this, because I remember really, really liking it. Life is kind of hectic right now, but I just wanted you to know I knew ...

Hmm... very interesting. As soon as I saw the paragraphs all smooshed together I almost left, but for some reason the opening line caught my attention so I kept reading. ...

If you'll space out the paragraphs a bit I would be more than happy to come back and read this. The lack of space is kind of hard on my ...

Hee hee. Pretty cool. I know my flight from Texas to New York and back wasn't THAT bad, thank goodness. Man, if I flew in that airline I might sue... ...

Ooh... I liked this. It seemed to have this neat feel of nostalgia while at the same time ignoring the world and getting to live in your own little place. ...

Cute. I could see it in one of those Jack Prulensky books or something. I like it. Nothing life-changing or profound, but I think it'd be a nice thing to ...

Boni is right about how the beginning doesn't really give any indication of what is to come. I thought the story told in the poem was a bit cliched, but ...

I have to agree. It seemed like you had a good idea hiding somewhere under all the vagueness, but I couldn't find it. I have no idea what this poem ...

I don't really know what kind of reaction you were going for here, but I thought it was pretty funny. The first thing it reminded me of was something Calvin ...