Ardor

I liked this. It was really nice. Well done. No seriously, it was good. I especially liked the one line ending. It added to the theme of silence and all. ...

Interesting. Very interesting. Original. Daring. Dark. Scary. Funny. Shizophrenic. Artful. Makes me hungry; nervous; makes me want to sing. Has a nice individuality to it. Reminds me of Greek gods. ...

Ooh! This is very fancy. Looks very professionally put together, I liked the introduction, and your language is great. A lot of my stuff is completely the opposite; looks like ...

Heh. It was ok. Some funny moments, like the last line, but I found it a little hit-and-miss. The idea is a bit cliche, and I found the part when ...

I'm surprised no one has commented on this yet. This is great! Although I found the exclamation point after the chorus a bit cliche and corny, it has very good ...

I liked this. Very much. Seemed like every line counted and had a really nice structure. However, my only suggestion is to perhaps revise the last two paragraphs. I didn't ...

This is good. I liked your structure as it was interesting. I also liked the shilly-shally thing which was original. However, I found the opening line very cliched. It is ...

Celtic, this is amazing. I loved your language, and how you created a sense of isolation throughout. And yes, your title pretty much sums the whole poem's theme up: abandonment. ...

Um, no offence, but it is way too short. I think you've got everything right- but the length! I think you should add much more verses to carry on your ...

the words of William Burroughs, "pay it all pay it all pay it all back". I think this is ok, but it kind of tells us about how lost this ...

I didn't really feel that the repetition of 'I'll never die' was needed for the last line, but overall a solid poem. You have put great effort into this, if ...

This was...interesting. It was like having epilepsy, and flashing lights of random would blare in your eyes randomly. I also died laughing during your story. It was not as you ...

I love this! It is great! Each line has it's own distinctive importance which I love, and your use of flow is really quite lovely so I can read the ...

Great poem! It has a nice simplicity to it I think. I also liked how you made the two stanzas link in rhyme. My only suggestion is the same thing ...

Oh goody! Yet another spellbinding chapter from you! I think each of your chapters focuses on a specific aspect. In this aspect, I love how you have mainly focused on ...