Angels-Symphony

Hey Tally ^^ Shina here for a review ;) Overall The main problem I saw with this is that you're jam packing your sentences with adjectives. There's a define line ...

Hey Fantasy ^^ Shina here for a review ;) Overall You're half telling, half showing, and it's turning into an info-dump: The freezing temperature broke through the thin coat of ...

Hey Skjold^^ Shina here for a review ;) Overall Your title is the "Mage of Dragons", yes? And there is more than one mage? Your mages don't have unique personalities. ...

Hey Ikram ^^ Shina here for a review ;) Overall The main problem I see with this is redundancy. The timbers fell from him as his arms became loose and ...

Hey Lily ^^ Shina here for a review ;) I'm on an overall spree today :P Overall First things first, your title. I feel like it's halfway hooking, halfway not. ...

Hey Dakota ^^ Shina here for a review ;) I'm on an overall review spree, so I'm not nitpicking today. So... Overall When I first began reading this, I thought ...

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Hey Jishbee ^^ Shina here to do a review ;) A dashed line which divides the road Imparts drivers to stick to a code. The first line seems to be ...

Okay, Pen! Shina here to do a review for you! I tried reviewing it the other day, but I was staring at it for quite a while and I decided ...

Hey Avenger ^^ Shina here to do a review ;) I'll admit that it was the title that really interested me. So let's see if the poem lives up to ...

Hey Aqua ^^ Shina here for a review ;) The scorching sun, The blazing heat, Pounding down, Onto the street. A whirlwind of lotions, Bikinis and tans. Painted nails, Magazines ...

Hey Ian ^^ Shina here to do a review for you ;) Lover who woke me as I lay, I dreamt of you Taking sight of past suns, till gaze ...

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Hey Fantasy ^^ Shina here for a review ;) This would have been far easier Had I started it on time. Now I have to get this done And think ...

Hey KayC ^^ Shina here to do a review for you ;) Sisters screech and bicker and scream, and pull out each other’s hair; Sisters are always by your side, ...