Angel17

I think this is a great poem. I love the visual descriptions as it helps convey the passion the dancers have. The rhythm is smooth and flows so well. Wonderful ...

I really enjoyed reading this. It was well written, and the scene was described well. The ending was sweet. Overall, it was good reading a play, which didn't have any ...

This had powerful imagery and a range of emotions strongly conveyed through your words. Excellet poem. I also thought the repetition of 'shattering' near the end of the poem was ...

Not all the lines flowed well, but some did. I did not thik you had to rhyme quite as frequently as you did in this poem. My hands fell down ...

The alliteration was wonderfully done. All your words blended well together. Healing throughout Each word a bandage To the scarred mind of the writer This metaphor was excellent and one ...

Firstly i have to say i was a little confused at moments. But i did understand straight away that john did not come back to life, it was just in ...

Firstly; To fly home to its tree. This line was very weak. Overall, i didn't feel any real deep emotion or see any in depth imagery in this poem. And ...

It sings like a hymn Growls like a beast Warm as the sun Dark as the night Just a suggestion; I think 'dark' should be 'cold' as it will contrast ...

Consciousness sinks into wonder, And wonder into awe, This was my favourite part, i liked the rhythm in these lines. I did find the rhyming a little off however. Overall ...

This didn't really flow and had no real rhythm. I liked the content and this part; Tears stream down my face, I scream "It's too late, You've caught me at ...

I liked the subtle rhyming. You managed to convey emotions well. And these deep, dank dark holes? Harder out than in I loved the alliteration. This was my favourite part. ...

The vocabulary you used was excellent. I loved this story, i really got into immediatly. I liked the way you gave both characters their own voice(using their vocab, Such as ...

This was wonderful poetry. I really loved the 1st stanza the most. I especially loved the contrast made between fire dancing and bitter cold truth. Great poem :D

I actually liked your breath hit my skin are now bruised and your hands sprawled across my body to get your phone left burn marks I thoughtthese two parts were ...

I liked the sudden shocking event, it certainly shocked me as the reader! Your rhythm was off, but the way it was wriiten was good. I thought you really managed ...