AndNeverAgainx3

hahaha, i love it! you have a way with words!

oo. intriguing. usually i'm into the whole teen realistic fiction stuff, but this is good too! its a refreshment from some stale stories i have seen on the forum. keep ...

thanks for the critique! i am hoping to read more of conscience, too =]] yes, the personality consisting of thing did sound awkward. i was already editing that out =] ...

ahh. you're an amazing poet. it's really hard to convey something with only a few words, but you pulled it off. i love the imagery. [is that a word?] XD

really? you think it's good? i wrote it back in october and i JUST found it. i thought it was pish posh. XD thanks!

thanks for the critique! yeah, royboy is one of my best friends and we established that nobody understands the message board thing [apparently aol message boards were so three years ...

its good. but the first line doesn't make sense. monotony is obviously predictable. look up the definition. X]

hmm. intriguing. =] no critiques just yet!

ohh i see. go check out that chapter i posted if you have the chance =] i want some critiques before i continue on with the cheesiness. i changed the ...

roya, i only gave you 55 pages... XD and yeah i already changed the highlights thing and the emo/screamo thing on the paper. did you see?

this is the type of story i'm generally interested in. it's realistic and it's interesting. this is a good first chapter; however, i think you should add an intro. some ...

i really like it! it's an intriguing intro! i want more! =] it would take me awhile to think of something like this. my intro to my story is kinda ...

i saw that. there at the top. why not? i have five minutes before my carpool lady comes and i want to. =]]]]] but fineeeee. are my criticisms okay? cuz ...

hmmm... black parade... like mcr. =D i love your detail.